A couple come giggling up the walkway approaching the gate of the verranda. 'Oh what a good time', 'my god you look beautiful', are all heard in various forms and courses. She stops and faces him at the gate, staring into his eyes as he wraps his arms around her, locking her between him and the gate. Arched over, his eyes are directly level with her boldly red lips, glistening in the porchlight, with gloss and passion. Slowly elevating his head driving her body back towards the gate, her back evetually bending over the gate, his eyes meet hers, their mouths on level they glide together, locking in a heated kiss. Passion passing between lips barely parted, tongues twined round each other saying at the same time 'stay with me always' and also 'i'll never leave you'.2
Slipping the latch to the gate open the couple swing into the enclosed porch. Her back is now to the fence and he is leaning into her neck ravishing her with kisses. Slowly kissing up her neck, stopping to taste her earlobe, the bittersweet taste, which tastes like honey to his lips. Drifting down her cheek to her lips, gracing them with but one kiss leaving them desiring and even seeking further contact with his lips. 3
"Kyle do you really need me?" asked the girl, in utter disbelief of what she was letting happen around her. 4
"Of course I do Wendie, if I didn't have you, I don't know what I would do with myself. You take such good care of me. I'd be lost without your love." He graced her ear with the only noises she cared to hear this night. The only thing she wanted to hear was the truth. And he would say nothing but to her.5
She pushes him off of her and he steps back a pace. A worried look crossing his face for a second before the look of christmas glazes over his eyes once more. There before him the only present he has never asked for. And it is his to open, and explore.6
She drives him back further till the low slung porch swing taps the back of his legs and he is forced to sit down. He clammers down onto the swing and is immediately joined by her. She sits over his lap with knees on either side of his hips. Hair draping down over the sides of his head. A small version of the tunnel of love, just staring into each others eyes. There is even music playing, like music from a jewellery box. But the night is completely silent. And they both move to the same song. She whips her hair back to no avail as the silken strands slide down either side of her head and come back to nestle again upon his shoulders.7
She cranes her neck down so her lips can again taste the salt on his upper lip. The heat of the night has their clothes clinging to them.8
She leans back putting her hands on his kneecaps. Saying 'I want you so much right now' and also 'the longer I make you wait the better it will be'. Like Eve she is offering his snakish side a juicy bite of the apple. He places his hands on the small of her back and holds up her waist. She swings her arms out to either side head falling back over her spine. He pulls her body into him. Her head is the last thing that whips towards him. Stopping at the last second she is momentarily silhouetted by a dark halo of hair, before her hair continues its momentum over his head. Again enclosing them in the shelter they both seek in each others arms. Hiding momentarily from the car alarms and cell phone beepers. There are only two people in the world right now.9
Hair falling down his shoulders he stands up off the porch swing. Her legs swiftly and easily wrapping around him in the same motion. His hands go over her back pockets fingers overlapping across the seam of her pants. He walks her over to the door and leans her against the doorjamb. Taking a firmer grasp of her bottom with one hand he removes his other to the screen door and pries it open with a distracted grasp. He spins into the screen door letting it close on her back. Still fumbling with the main door, he hasn't taken his eyes off of her since they got onto the porch. Nothing else has penetrated his view. They quietly disappear inside and the screen door creeks closed behind them.10
Author notes
damn the man club! this story features or is based upon works of the author Epiphany Angel...go check her out...
ps-it is more like features cuz i started to write this before i found her bite of the apple story which features a porch swing(also skinny dipping)
pps-it was also modified to fit in lines of text from the story shattered, parts one and two of which are available from Epiphany Angels page
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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wow this is the first story i read of yours and it is awsome u write so well that u can actually see what is happening like u were there i loved this story i am going to read more lol*smiles*
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I love it!
nice write JP *smiles* i loved it! thx for suggesting it....
ttyl
foralways and forever,
AngelicLove (aka) Amanda
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Ok. I was going to say. This sounds like some excerpt from another novel or short story.
Well this story is good in some ways. The action scene is hot. The plot of how they got there is disjointed, seeming added on or missing the lead up to this scene.
I think when the "apple" references come up, the woman might be offering her breasts which are shapped like apples; also here I think her neck is in danger of falling off:
She leans back putting her hands on his kneecaps. Saying 'I want you so much right now' and also 'the longer I make you wait the better it will be'. Like Eve she is offering his snakish side a juicy bite of the apple. He places his hands on the small of her back and holds up her waist. She swings her arms out to either side head falling back over her spine. He pulls her body into him. Her head is the last thing that whips towards him.
Dialogue:
Not enough to cement the fiction aspects, but you know how to write correct dialogue from bits I see.
Summary:
I refashion this to your own erotica story. Start with a legimate beginning give it a solid middle and satisfying end. -
Enjoyed this read a lot
Like the others I like how the door closes behind them
Great job
I just posted a new one earlier too do come see me won't you?
Blessings
Susan~~

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Great work; the language is good, the words well-chosen. I like how it ends with the door closing behind them. It's a nice way to wind down the story. Your way of describing action between them is nice; I like it. Very good. Keep it up.
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THANX!!!!!!
Thanks for the credit, sweets! ::Smiles BIG!:: By the way, this is an amazing story, you have a way with describing things that amazes me! Keep up the good work!
~Epiphany
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Hmm.....some elements of this story seem vaguely familiar. I wonder why? (And I get no credit? :
outing:
::Smiles::
~Epiphany
