'Remember, when I die you will have the bracelet'. Said my grandma and she died. Tears trickled down my face. I stopped crying and told my mum and dad. We had a funeral two days later.1
'I stared at my bracelet my grandma gave to me and held it tightly, I wondered what it could do. I took it with me always, although I didn't know what to do.2
The bracelet was blue, and a shape of a bird was on it. I told my friends but they didn't know about it either. One month after I got the bracelet, my best friend Emily showed me a book.3
It was called: The bird bracelet. It was about a bracelet and that on the owner's birthday, they would be a bird for two days. Just a storybook, I thought. I want to fly but a storybook is not real I told myself. But I didn't know that it was true, so true...4
Months later5
It was nearly March the 14th five more days to go. And the special thing was that it was my birthday. I remembered about the story book I read. What a coincidence! And then I thought about my grandma. It made me feel sad.6
I invited all my friends to my birthday party and they all agreed to come. It is going to be fun. I thought happily. I looked at my bracelet and said to myself 'don't believe in storybooks'.7
Five days later8
I woke up and remembered that it was my birthday. I was happy. I put on my bracelet for good luck and went out to the sitting room.9
I suddenly felt lighter, much lighter than before. I looked at my wings. Huh? My wings? 'Okay, storybook, what you said came true'. I said. But all which came out was a 'tweet tweet' from my voice.10
I flew to my parents and to believe it, it was so easy. I tweeted with all my might. But, my parents just wondered where was I.11
When they saw me, they just said 'what a nice bird' and went away. They didn't know I was their daughter. I was beginning to feel hungry. I asked myself, what do birds eat?12
I flew out of the window flying about finding food.It was a great feeling of it. Zooming in the air. I just felt a bit light. Oh well, doesn't mater. I really loved the floating feeling. I wanted to do acrobactics in the air but of course I couldn't. 13
I looked at some berries on top of a tree and imedietly ate it. Yum, those berries taste sweet. I ate more. I thought about that book again. I will only become a bird for two days, I thought. So, I need to survive.14
I met a sparrow and communicated with it. It was friendly and since we were both birds, we could talk to each other. The sparrow told me about the dangers like cars and where to eat. I already knew where to eat.15
I flew for a moment then landed on the ground. I car came and I quickly flew away. I ate berries. After two days, I turned back to human. 16
My parents were worried and I explained everything to them. They didn't believe me but I myself was glad to be home. I missed my birthday party but it dosn't mater. I always wanted to fly. I came outside and I saw a sparrow and it chirped at me. It was familiar and I knew that this was the sparrow which had helped me. 17
Author notes
Hopes the judge likes it. Crosses fingers to be between 500 words and 1500.
A contest entry
- The 'what if?' Prompt contest by Fuzzyheart.
100 points, ended November 9, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Okay for the contest?
Comments
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do you know that my name is emily
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is her granma ok?
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Amzaing story with very organiszed structure. And the spellings and grammer are much improved. Proud of you.


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This is really good. I'm always impressed with how well you write for someone so young. There were good descriptions and very good spelling and grammar.
About the only thing I think this is missing is more description of when she's flying since you emphasized that's what she really wanted. It'd be great to see how you believe flying would feel to you as a bird.
Terrific job! Hope you do well in the contest!
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Thanks for comenting. Glad you liked it.
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good
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Thanks for comenting.
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Wow! Very nice
I really loved this. Much improved spelling.
'I looked at my wings. Huh? My wings?'
I liked this sentence very much! Clever! All the best with the contest!!


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