He paused, his face mere inches from mine, holding my gaze more attentively than he ever had, and close enough that I could see my inquisitive reflection in the depths of his eyes and feel his breath blow across my lips.
Author notes
Excerpt from "Crooked Heart" which is posted.
A contest entry
- Hook Me. by Kevan.
100 points, ended October 30, 2008, 73 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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This seems very intersting and i look forward to checking it out
Great hook! and best of luck in the contest!
Rian
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Enrapturing, but not enough to hook me. I guess tis cause this scene is parallel to so many romantic scenes across the literary world. It's beautifully written but not a hook, per se.
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I feel exactly the same way, and I like that you said it.
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Phew! Most people would have replied wiht a "Can you not be so nasty?" comment. o__o I'm glad you didn't.
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no way, I'd much rather hear the truth. Unless it's clear that someone's being nasty just to be nasty, but that's a whole different story.
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Send me the link.
I would love to take a look at it.
Was very provocative and romantic.
GOOD LUCK
Temaria
Blair
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Whoa...
This is so romantic and beautiful. It's awesome how you can add both power and sensitivity into a simple line. Anyways, great job. Best of luck in my contest.
xoxox.
Kevan.
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