Noah’s eyes shimmered with a watery sheen. “I would damn near beg for you, to be near you, when I’m at ho--the cottage. I miss you all the ti--this is so much harder than I thought it would be.”35
Author notes
My story is Midnight in Oakdale. I hope what I submitted is okay, it's kind of like one line. =/
A contest entry
- Hook Me. by Kevan.
100 points, ended October 30, 73 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice..............
....For a couple of sentences. In it's short entirety, there is a lot of emotion and expression in the words. It leaves you wanting to discover more about the character and what the story could possibly be about. Maybe it's romance. I get that vibe.=)=) -
Agreed with Blair. The stuttering is wonderfully done! Very clever way of putting heart into this piece. ^_^
Good piece here.
-HT
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Great line... I appreciate the contest of the piece. the Hidden words inside the stuttering and stalling. It add mystery to it. Why not home.... ect.... I loved it.
GOOD LUCK
Temaria
Blair
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Good job. Very romantic and good job with pulling me in. I hope to read more when the time comes. Until then, really good entry and good luck in the contest.
xoxox
Kevan.
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