His smile reached one side of his face to the other, his eyes dancing to a silent song of joy. For that moment…for that ONE golden moment…Luke was absolutely breathtakingly beautiful. I didn’t even know guys could be called beautiful, but that was the perfect word for Luke at that moment. And for that moment, I understood why Noah cared so much about Luke’s happiness. His sincere, heartfelt smile is one of the greatest gifts someone could ever receive.
Author notes
My story is called "View from an Outsider"
A contest entry
- Hook Me. by Kevan.
100 points, ended October 30, 2008, 73 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Sounds like in interesting story, bit more a a blurb than one line, but this was really hooking...great job with it.
Rian Dyiti.
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Beautiful wording there. Drew me in very much. ^^ I liked how you repeated the words, and it gave a captivating effect.
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This was beautiful.
I found that the last line really complimented the whole sentence and that the meaning and emotion behind that one sentence alone told so much it filled my heart with yearning. Something I can connect with. I enjoyed it.
Send me the link.
GOOD LUCK
Temaria
Blair
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This is exactly the type of thing that pulls one into a romance story. A compliment. A single compliment.
I wish to read more of this, so really good job with that. Good luck in my contest, and feel free to enter as many times as you want. The more entries, the more the chance.
Good luck!!
xoxox
Kevan.
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