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Malicious humor flickered in the pair of blue eyes observing the performance; the watcher grinned but didn’t offer to help.
A contest entry
- Hook Me. by Kevan.
100 points, ended October 30, 2008, 73 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh man, this is just amazing. In that one sentence you took my breath away with the detail and imagery of it. Wow, very good job!
Peace,
Rosie
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I loved this.
It could stand alone (it may be a story in itself
), or it can even be a finale OR the beginning of some twisted tale where the performer is betrayed by someone who could have helped.. well, that was the idea that your words planted in my braind
I enjoyed this a lot, partly because it painted more than the length of its piece. Your few words did not limit your creativity from showing through
And I admire it
Thank you for sharing this, Geri
(Finally, I've read a piece of your writing! More to go, woot!)
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It's strange how one sentence can push someoen to read an entire story. This was really great, hooking and intersting. Best of luck in the contest!
Rian Dyiti -
Oooh, very very intriguing, definitely! I'm imagining this in a million different ways. It could lead to anything.
-HT
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well that's just mean....lol....but I bet it's a good story...good luck in the contest
Blessed Be
Lauren
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I agree with Pamela..
so many questions need to be awnsered.
Could you send me the link.
I want to know ...
GOOD LUCK
Temaria - Blair
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Ok I'm hooked. Whose are the blue eyes? What was the performance? Why was help needed? I can't wait to find out the answers.
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 2, characters: 4.
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This is truly captivating.
As if the line has its own force of gravity, it is drawing me in. I want to read more... to see what he is performing.
Great line. Well written and good suspense. Be sure to put the title of your story in the author notes or IM me with it before the contest ends so you have a fair chance of winning.
xoxox
Kevan.
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