Passionate Captor

The night was wet and cold.  She rushed up the stairs to her apartment door wanting only to go in, take a steaming hot shower, enjoy a nice hot cup of tea and read some more of her newest trashy romance novel. Opening the door she reached in to flip on the lamp but nothing happened.1

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She hated walking into a dark room but it couldn’t be helped. Walking in, she locked the door and shivered but thought nothing of it. Turning away from the door she suddenly saw him, standing just a foot away. The moonlight filtering through the window showed him as nothing more then a shadow.3

Suddenly, he reached out, covering her mouth as she opened it to scream. He then pulled her into his strong arms a tingle of fear ran down her spine as she slammed against his hard body. Close to her ear she could feel his hard breaths.
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Nipping at the lobe of her ear he growled, “I’m going to take my hand from your mouth. You are not to scream. Understand?”6

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Too scared to say anything she remained motionless.8

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Biting her ear, he barked, “Answer me!” 10

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She nodded slowly and he removed his hand. Tracing it down her chin, neck and then he flicked her nipple through her blouse. She flinched.
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Laughing he grasped her arms and led her to her bedroom.
In the room there was one bedside table lamp turned on to display everything he had set out. Finally looking at her four poster bed, she saw each post now had a chain and cuff coming from it. She tried to turn to see her captor’s face but was quickly blindfolded. Shoved forward, she stumbled only to be caught by his muscular hands. Instead of merely steadying her, he picked her up and threw her onto the bed.
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Too scared to struggle she was quickly restrained by the cold silver cuffs. Fear coursed through every fiber of her body as she laid there spread eagle. Not knowing what he had planned she thought only of the worst.
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The room completely silent, she heard a soft click and knew immediately it was a knife. Terrified she opened her mouth to scream, but suddenly it was filled with a gag that was strapped into place. Shaking uncontrollably now she felt her satin blouse pulled away from her skin and then heard the knife cut through the material. All she had covering her upper half now was her lacy demi bra. Then she felt the cold, hard tip of the knife at her waist and snake its way quickly up cutting the front of her bra so that it fell to either side of her.
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Setting the knife down, he bent down closer towards her and she felt his tongue glide its way from one nipple to the other. Her breath hitched as he continued to lick her nipples and they hardened. He laughed and then bit her nipple pulling it; she felt the sting of his teeth and the pull.
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He left her then and she heard something being unzipped. She didn’t remember seeing a bag, just so many other things that were not usually in her room, so her mind automatically assumed he was undressing himself. Suddenly he was back and his hands were at her breasts but there was something else and she couldn’t tell what. The next minute she knew, writhing in agony she felt the bite of the nipple clamp on her left breast and then another one on her right. He chuckled at her struggle to move and sat back to watch for a moment.
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“Stop!” he ordered her. She froze, whimpering behind the gag and tears filling her eyes behind the blindfold.
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Lying there, helpless she heard him at her bedside table and then he was gone, she couldn’t feel his presence like she had. Feeling something at her feet she knew he was there. His knife silently ripping through her long skirt, he climbed onto the bed between her opened legs. Finally at the waistband he made quick work of her belt and the skirt fell to the bed below.
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Her cheeks burned with embarrassment for today was a day she had felt a bit daring and worn her sexiest lingerie; a soft grey lace pair of boy shorts that matched her demi bra. No man had ever seen her with this little on. Her heart pounded in her chest as she waited to see what her captor would do next. It didn’t take her long to find out.
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Roughly he grasped the crotch of her panties and pulled. They ripped easily and she was left with no more defenses, no matter how meager they were. Her body became taught with fear as he sat there and gazed down at her.
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Suddenly she felt his hand brushing at her apex, almost a caress instead of the hard handed ways he had been using. In that instant of his softness she became weak and he watched her become wet for him. She was so surprised at her reaction to him and ashamed. This was not a normal reaction for any sane person; becoming aroused by someone such as him and what he was doing to her, yet she was.
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As his one hand continued its ministration of soft pressure on her, the other was reaching up and pulling at the clamps he had placed on her nipples, first pulling at one then the other. She barely felt the clamps now because she kept all of her focus on what he was doing down below. Slowly his hand drew away and she felt nothing other then her own longing.
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Then there was the touch of one simple finger, gentle at first then harder playing over her button. Now she felt the second hand leave her breasts and make its way down her body. In an instant she felt his finger slide through her folds gently, making sure she was wet for even he did not want to hurt her. His finger played at her hole for a moment before pulling out. She could swear she heard him inhale sharply as though he smelled her passion and then she felt him at her again this time shoving two fingers roughly into her. She again tried to cry out, to no avail.
His fingers were playing havoc inside her, his other hand now pulling and twisting her clit. He knew she was a virgin and she feared the impending pain. Suddenly he withdrew again this time to return with something in his hands. She had no clue what it was but she had a feeling she knew what it was to be used for. He touched her with it first her belly, turning it on she felt the vibrations. He traced it up to her breasts from one clamp to the other.
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Throughout it all she tried to fight the desire building within her, again she was ashamed for feeling this way. She was a good girl, never caused problems, never dated, always did as expected and yet, now, in the hands of a brutal stranger she felt wanton. Knowing it was wrong she wanted him to continue.38

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The perpetrator slowly and teasingly drew designs down her curves to rest just on her button driving her completely insane. She began moaning with a new pleasure that caused her captor to laugh even more.
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“Liking this are ya?” he growled. “Wonder how much you’ll like it when I am buried within that juicy cunt of yours.”42

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She was amazed, she had only read words like that online and yet here they turned her on even more. The vibrator at her clit was driving her crazy and she knew she would soon be delirious. Increasing the vibrations and pressure on her he began to finger her again. She moaned, she twisted and soon shivers cascaded through her body and he knew she had, had her first real climax.
She was terrified of the feelings that coursed through her. She had never felt anything as explosive before. She was losing control; a moan escaped her from behind the gag. His hands at her core were driving her crazy and the constant vibrations upon her clit were more then she could take. She knew in the midst of this orgasm that this was merely the beginning.
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His hands left her. She felt him move closer, the denim of his trousers brushed her inner thigh just as he leaned in to lick her stomach. She was shocked when she felt his teeth first nip at her skin and then bite down, she knew that a mark would be left there tomorrow but he had not broken the skin.
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He lowered himself continuing to nip and bite his way down, never relenting the pressure of the vibrator on her. He hovered over her center now, she could feel his breath on her and it sent more shivers up her spine. The vibrator was removed and she could only feel his breath. His arms reached under her to angle her so she was now wide open to his mouth. Her wet pinkness was a beautiful and tantalizing site for him. He leaned in closer 48

just barely touching her with his tongue.
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She bucked against his mouth, wanting him to ravage her. Virginity, be damned! As his tongue played over her she knew this was a feeling she didn’t want to give up.
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His tongue dove in lapping up the juices as she released them. His fingers were back within her as his tongue stroked her button, his teeth nipping and his lips pulling it. Deeper and deeper the fingers probed.
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Wave after wave of pleasure ripped through her as he continued his assault on her. She bucked against his eager tongue and trenchant fingers. She filled his mouth as she exploded with an enthusiastic moan. He continued his tirade through each wave of pleasure finally stopping only after cleaning her.55

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She was dizzy with pleasure. Her mind reeling with all that had been done to her. Her body pulsed with the want of more. In the back of her mind she knew she should be afraid but the pulsing of her body forced her to ignore it.
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Again he backed away from her. She groaned at his sudden absence then became very silent listening for him. She was trying to figure out what he was doing. Softly she heard two clunks, a zipper sliding down and then the rustling of denim and leather. He was undressing; she knew what was coming next. Her breathing quickened at the thought and her mind reeled with worries and excitement. Will it hurt? Yes, oh my yes! Will it fit? Please! Now! How does it feel? DO ME ALREADY! Each thought fought for the control. She felt him crawl onto the bottom of the bed again. As he got closer and closer she felt his power emanating from him.59

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Suddenly he was there, hovering over her. He pulled the clamps still on her aching nipples and bit the tender skin under her breasts. He nibbled his way up her chest to her neck then on to her ear. With each scrape of his teeth she moaned.
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Biting her lobe he growled, “The taste of pussy is fantastic but yours is better then others. A sweet virgin you are but shall not be when I am done. You will be just another bitch.” At that point he shifted and lowered himself to her. His hardness pressed against her folds and she groaned.
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“Bitch do you want this?”
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All she could do was nod.
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“Show me you want me!”
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She didn’t know how to show him this, with her arms and legs chained and her mouth still filled with the gag. She slowly began to grind against him, movement difficult because of the restrictions. She felt him slide against her lips and widened her legs more trying to let him in.
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He chuckled at her attempts to show him and growled, “Ready?”
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Nodding, yes she moaned. Next thing she knew he was gone. Then she felt his hands on either side of her. She tensed as she felt him plunge down. Only the head entered her juicy center and she screamed behind the gag.
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“Relax or it will hurt even more,” he growled above her. Moving one hand down her body he began playing with her clit again. 77

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With each flick, twist or pull she relaxed a bit and he was able to slip in more.
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She felt that he hit something. Suddenly his hand was back at her side and he was with drawing himself. She whined, she didn’t want to feel the emptiness. He plunged down quickly ripping through that wall he had hit at first.
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A scream fought its way around the gag as the pain and pleasure ripped through her. He was buried completely within her and she heard him groan, “Oh god, you’re so tight!” She relaxed a bit more around him and he began a rocking motion with her. Barely moving in her at all she pulsed around him coming closer and closer to another climax. He pulled out all but the head and dove in hard and fast.
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This time she exploded. Behind the blindfold all she could see were stars.
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He slowed his invasion to give her time to come down from this orgasm even as she pulsed around him.
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Slowly she came down from this one but he knew he was ready to explode. He withdrew and slammed into her over and over, faster and faster. She could feel him growing even larger. Each time he withdrew she held her breath and when he plunged in she let it out with a whoosh. His speed increased and his breathing became even more ragged. Finally buried in her she felt him shudder and his body began to shake as he filled her with his seed.
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Feeling completely fulfilled with this, she climaxed again. This one was stronger than any she had felt so far. She was wild with pleasure straining against the chains and cuffs, arching her back, thrashing her head. As the orgasm hit its peak she passed out from pure joy.
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He rode her until he was done, then climbed off.
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When she awoke her mouth was free, as were her hands and feet. With weary arms she reached back to untie the blindfold. Slowly with a pleasurably aching body she sat up on her bed and looked around. Her room was as she had left it before work, the only addition two blood roses on the pillow beside her.95

Author notes

EXAMPLE: Amanda Vampiress
Option FOUR: CRIME, HORROR, EROTICA
Topic three: EROTICA/ROMANCE

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Comments

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  • CandyMan
    October 31

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    Sexy

    Damn this sure as hell aroused me. Damn girl! Now you have to make me go get off! Damn it Just teasing, I love getting off Great job!

  • scifibob
    September 25

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    Oh, Baby!

    You had me captivated from beginning to end. I wouldn't mind leaving you a coupls of roses myself.


    • MsAlee gold member
      September 25
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      Awww, scifibob you know just how to make a girl smile from your compliments,

      • scifibob
        September 25
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        Glad to know I was able to make you smile. After all, you made me more than smile when I read your story.

  • wow

    Ok so i already read this entry in a different contest but before you freak out i just wanted to let you know that it was a great story one that i wouldnt mind reading again so i read it through again and i loved even more the second time good job chica and by the way awesome details good luck in the contest

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • FireByrd
    July 11

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    I love you! That's all I can say! I love you I love you I love you! I am crying tears of joy here this was a pretty goddamned good write! I can say nothing but I love you and well... your a finalist. the first in fact


    • MsAlee gold member
      July 11
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      Thank you so much. and here i questioned whether you would count this as an obsession or not.


  • Fantasy500
    June 12

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    wow

    oh really WOW
    that was great my favorite part was what lady kay said
    i loved it
    it was hot.


  • dutch2lips
    June 4
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    an awesome write, very much a turn on, loved the way the rapist seemed to have compassion


  • Kammii Lee
    June 1

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    OMG...

    This story is so freaking awesome. I mean I love the way at the end of the story she passes out from the sheer pleasure she was getting. Oh, And I also liked this part:

    "She bucked against his mouth, wanting him to ravage her. Virginity, be damned! As his tongue played over her she knew this was a feeling she didn’t want to give up."

    I mean, I have felt like this before, wanting so bad to just give in to my feelings about something that i shouldn't and... Mmmmmmmm...

    Anyway I loved this, seriously!

  • Very good!

    The Captor is very interesting. Hah, this was a pleasure to read! But, since the story was told in no character's POV you could've added more descriptions about the captor.

    Thank you for entering my contest, good luck!

    --Liz


  • Emelite
    May 1
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    wow one of the best i've read! dunno what else to say juz dat it's fantastic!

  • This was definitely the kind of story I was looking for. It was passionate, erotic and had that air of danger that just spices up the scene. You did well to capture all the emotions that played throughout.

    The only problem I had was that it didn't seem to be broken up into seperate paragraphs, which made it kind of difficult to follow. Other than that, I didn't notice anything else that was wrong with it.

    You did a great job. This story is among some of the best I've read, not just in this contest, and not just on SW, but in other books that I have read.

    Well done, thanks for entering and good luck.

    • MsAlee gold member
      April 25
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      grrrrr, tried to fix the spacing and now it over spaced.

      Thanks for the comment and glad you liked it, i know tis one fantasy i hope shall come true in time (even if just playing with my fiancee').

  • Strawberry fantasy

    woooow!
    Do I need to say more than that!!!!


    • MsAlee gold member
      March 16
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      thanks so much i do believe that answered it perfectly!

  • Well done...
    I like how you didn't make the captor insensitive to how the girl would feel, it gives your story a little something extra. Also your characters were believable, and their I liked their personalities. The flow of the story was just right, not too fast or too slow. The descriptions were very vivid and thorough. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!


  • Lonesome Dove
    December 14, 2008

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    Very erotic. You always leave me.... mmmm wanting more!! You set it up brilliantly creating sexual tension right from the beginning. The anticipation of his every move was exciting. You gave him a heart and made him an object of desire, not just her. He allowed her to enjoy his touch rather than just fear him and that added to the beautiful flow of your story. The roses on the pillow were perfect. I hope.... he comes back.


  • Whispers silver member
    November 1, 2008
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    Yummy, I wish I had this kind of captor in my bedroom.
    Never read this kind of stuff before, but this is very sexy!
    It's good that the captor wasn't mean though, so he wasn't some emotionless sex-obsessed beast...you gave him feeling which added to the richness of the story.
    Lovely work from an even lovlier writer

    ~ Ink


  • Reaver Greeters member
    October 31, 2008

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    Have to remove from my contest cause it's over the word limit, but i did really enjoy the story! Thanks for entering the contest adn good luck in the others!


  • Bells Kelly
    October 12, 2008

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    wow...
    good job... really good job!
    I loved the way you played it and how it was set out.
    good work
    cheers
    Huter~


  • PinkKittens
    October 6, 2008

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    There is something ineffably thrilling about an arousal that is resisted at first but soon becomes undeniable. This story captures it well.


    • MsAlee gold member
      October 6, 2008
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      Thank you, your story 'Inevitable' does the same. I just love it!


  • Edens Angel
    October 5, 2008

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    Okay, firstly: You need to use commas more. I lost count of how many sentences just seemed to run on forever. One example was this sentence: "Suddenly he reached out covering her mouth as she opened it to scream, and pulled her into his strong arms." A comma after suddenly and out. Also, it would flow better if you put a period after scream, and made the next sentence "He then pulled her into his strong arms, and a tingle of fear ran down her spine as she slammed against his hard body".

    There were a LOT of sentences that had similar problems. I suggest you read it out loud, and wherever you feel a natural pause add a comma.

    I really liked this. I generally hate rape stories, but this wasn't brutal like others. I liked the fact that the guy actually seemed to care a little about whether or not he hurt her. Great write!

    Good luck!
    ~AE~


  • TNTrouble
    October 4, 2008

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    *growls and goes off to release some tension after reading the last bit*
    Excellent job baby...I am only sorry to see it have to end.


    • MsAlee gold member
      October 4, 2008
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      Thank you Hun! You never know what might happen later. We shall just have to see.


  • TNTrouble
    October 2, 2008
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    Ahhh well something tells Me...she is going to be getting more. At least I would be hoping so. *smiles*

    beginning: 5, plot: 5, characters: 5.


    • MsAlee gold member
      October 2, 2008
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      *smiles and laughs* Of course she is getting more, can't take her this far and just drop her now can I?


  • TNTrouble
    September 28, 2008
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    Mmmmmm...you would be driving Me crazy at this point darlin'...I am quite sure you realize that.


    • MsAlee gold member
      September 28, 2008
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      Well so much inspiration has been given to me, I can't help it. Glad to know your loving it.

  • mcfreeman
    September 27, 2008
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    captured

  • TNTrouble
    September 26, 2008
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    Ahhh...well you know this has made Me very hot indeed. I like this baby... I like this a lot so far. I am glad to know that you have been inspired... *growls*


    • MsAlee gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      mmmm, glad your liking it so far. I'm loving all the inspiration I get as well.


  • Sgs
    September 26, 2008

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    Oh yes! I love the way you write, such rich detailing. Great start, I look forward to seeing where this one goes.

    • MsAlee gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      Thanks so much. I decided to try something a little out of my realm of writing. Just hope I can keep it going as well as it started.

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