Original by Hunter-By-Moonlight.1
http://storywrite.com/story/2041842
Reworded/given vocal cues by me.3
Screams in the style of From Autumn to Ashes.4
Wails and Sung portions in the style of Remembering Never.5
Spoken in the style of Lamb of God6
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[Scream]I'm so f**ked up,8
and sick of this life,9
[Wail]So undermined10
Tired of being abused,11
[Tempo change(Faster)]12
[Scream]Mistrusted and used,13
Tossed 'cause of you.14
you don't understand,15
because you've Lost16
[Wail]me.17
[Instrumental break, Tempo slows.]18
[Sung ]Leave me alone19
I don't want to see you20
Get out of my sight21
Before I...22
[Pause. Silence.]23
[Instant tempo change. Much faster]24
[Scream] Kill you25
[Insert Self-indulgent guitar breakdown here]26
[Sung] You broke me for the [Sung/Screamed]first time.27
[Sung]I vow it will be the [Sung/Screamed]last time.28
[Spoken vocals only]Because you didn't count on me fighting you.29
[Spoken]I'd held on too long30
[Scream]I've gotten past you,31
[Spoken]My life's moved on,32
[Wail]No more abuse,33
[Scream] Because-34
[Silence]35
[Spoken] I Don't Care About You.36
[Sung ]Leave me alone37
I don't want to see you38
Get out of my sight39
Before I...40
[Scream]I'm so f**ked up,41
and sick of this life,42
[Wail]So undermined43
Tired of being abused,44
[Tempo change(Faster)]45
[Scream]Mistrusted and used,46
Tossed 'cause of you.47
you don't understand,48
because you've Lost49
[Wail]me.50
[Silence]51
[Spoken] If I could, I'd forget you.
Sounds like screamo?
Comments
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haha its like i could hear it just by reading. Nice.


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Hmm... I'd have to actually hear it to tell whether it would be good screamo or not, but I am a fan of screamo, as long as it is not excessive, this seems pretty good. One thing: It might be more effective to the song if you kind of half-whispered the last part instead of speaking it, that would be AWESOME! But that's just my personal opinion, it's also fine the way it is. Keep writing... Peace out cub scout.

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Cassy

