Freedom........ Freedom is a word of words that can mean a lot of things. with freedom comes great responsability, and is truth. What is life with out freedom. with out freedom i would be lost. no Where to turn or go. No place at all in this world. So let freedom FLY and take hold of all we know and want.1
The freedom of expresion alone is so powerfull. We can have our oppinions and not have to much turm oil with in reason. WE CAN TAKE hold of or lives, and live them ourselves. SO TAKE HOLD AND LET FREEDOM FLY.
A contest entry
- Freedom! by Writing0Freedom.
705 points, ended September 28, 2008, 7 entries
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Comments
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I think the ideas are very good but a little more description would be good. Write more- make it more vivid . I'm starting to understand but I'm only partially there. Also can you run this through a grammar check please- that would make it easier to read. The very last lines could be very powerful but I feel they need more before them to create suspense or context.
You have potential!
Well done though- its a start.
Thanks for entering!
WritingFree
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