Laying on the floor1
Everything hurts 2
Freezing in the cold3
Shaking all over 4
Stomach in knots5
The beast rages within6
Everything hurts 7
Thinking to myself8
I just need a fix9
Never thought I did10
I thought that I could11
Take it or leave it12
Until I wound up in here13
Laying on the floor14
Stomach in knots 15
Shaking all over 16
Feeling like dying17
Wishing I could 18
The beast rages within 19
I used to think 20
It was a cool thing21
Stick a needle in my arm22
Escape from the world23
I thought that I could24
Take it or leave it 25
I never imagined 26
Laying on the floor 27
Freezing in the cold 28
Thinking to myself29
I just need a fix30
When did this happen31
Pleasure became torment32
Savior turned into 33
Destroyer of my soul34
Having a bit of fun35
Wound up with me here36
Shaking all over37
Freezing in the cold 38
Stomach in knots39
Laying on the floor 40
Author notes
Another attempt at the pantoum style of poem.
A contest entry
- I LOVE POETRY! by Sgs.
350 points, ended October 3, 2008, 127 entries
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Comments
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I love this so much, thank you for entering it in the contest!
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Awww T. *HUGS* I hate that you are going through all of this at once. You know I'm here for you anytime.
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Damn! I don't think you could have described withdrawal any better than this. Not only your words, but the way you structured this piece, really makes an impact. You are an awesome writer!
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I like how you worded this one, mate, very nice!!! I actaully read it twice, but I don't know why, I was actually unaware until mid word that I was reading it again... weird...
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I love..love..love this style: The sweet repetition to make your point heard!!! the challenges you face amongst the pain and aggression of your addiction. An addiction I know so well..Of course not from me but loved ones and I have seem the cruel affects.
Keep it up
You are strong and courageous
I continue to admire that
Blair
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