Stars Part 1

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I stared at the sky, so beautiful. I looked at the stars, shining so brightly. I saw something, not a comet, because it was so much smaller than a comet. I saw it fall down to earth.2

I asked it questions, I know its silly. But to my suprise, It speaked. It was like a star, yellow and bright. Wow, I've never seen such a star like that. It said: 'The bad stars have pushed me to the ground and stolen the star queen's crown. Without it we stars will die. They have set a spell that only young girls like you can save us stars.' 3

'I don't understand' I said. The star said 'look in the stars book'. I loved that book, that was only the first book, there is two parts in it. But, the second part never was written. There was no second part.4

It goes like this: 'a girl saw a star which has fallen down, she picked it up. To her astonishment, the star spoke. 'help me. Bad stars in my land have pushed me down to earth. They also took away the queen's magic crown. Without it, we stars will die in two days. They cast a spell on me so only young girls like you could save me '. The girl agreed and the star used it's flying power to bring her up to the land where stars live.' 5

I asked the star if what was in the book was true. He said yes sadly so off we went. I realised that I was the girl in that story. We went up, zooming in the clouds. It was so high up and finally, we were there.6

I saw stars lots of stars which were unhappy, I guess it was because of the bad stars. The star which fell on the ground showed me to a palace. 'It isn't the queen's palace, It is where the bad stars live, they hid the crown in a secret chamber. We also need to say a password to go in.' I knew the story to the password. I knew it. It is this: manahana.

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  • patrickhschan
    October 5, 2008
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    what was a comet?


  • Kirin
    September 27, 2008

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    Beautiful story! I loved it!!! Bad Star, Good Star? Very original! You have improved your grammar very much. It makes the story even more interesting! I'm going to the second part now!!

    Shall I point out some mistakes?
    p2: It speaked-spoke is the correct word.
    p4: there is(are) two parts in it.