In order to tell this story with the respect that it deserves, I must state that there were good times before the part where the real story begins. Before April 3, 2007, it was paradise. Life was good for me, and I didn't think it was going to turn upside down that quickly.
Her English had been perfect until that point, so that was when I knew. Trying to hide it was difficult, the way in which I simply said OK must have given something away...I'll never know now, of course. 31
Foolishly, I thought "prepare yourself sometime Thursday." The following day, Easter Monday, I logged in at 7.09am to find the news that Chris had passed. I reacted calmly, surprisingly so, merely turning to music as my comfort. A song called "All Things Must Pass" by George Harrison, a song which Chris and I both appreciated: 10
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Comments
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I've read the full version of April, and I loved it. Your writing was very moving. In this shorter version, that second paragraph seems misleading until the third paragraph, when it makes sense; that was a great way to do it!
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Although written well, this seems to be lacking a little explaination which leaves it somewhat confusing. (Maybe it's not knowing the relationship between you and Chris.) Still a well phrased piece.
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I found this a little confusing.
Not so much in a sense of what was happening but where it was going. I wanted more.. a little more impact. Though the circumstance - almost coincedence was intersting.
I think that is what caught me. You might need to explain it more.
good luck
Blair - Temaria
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