I'm kneeling over the husk of what used to be a living, breathing boy and inside, the monster wears a ghoul's grin. And I must admit, I'm not completely without a little nugget of joy myself. This one was a fighter, after all, and it's always so much more fun when the hurly-burly happens. Looking at the blood and viscera on my hands, I feel more like I've just gutted a pumpkin than an actual person.1
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It's dark now and trick-or-treating has come full swing. Kids are everywhere, shepherded by a few adults and teens, and there's laughter in the October air, but it doesn't mean much to me. All of them dressed up as cowboys and creatures, athletes and killers, pretty princesses and comic book superheroes, pretending they're something to respect or fear. Wearing masks so they can be something other than themselves. Tonight you can lie and you can laugh and you can lose yourself for a while and then go back to being happy and stupid and normal tomorrow morning. But tonight is all that's left of my world. There is no tomorrow.3
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…And I disappear.
A contest entry
- Beginning, Middle and End Paragraphs - Easy Points! by Melancholic Smile.
375 points, ended October 17, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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Superb
What a taster! This is an excellent piece which leaves me wanting more. Your use of language is a real joy and you create an atmosphere and a sense of unease. Who knows what lies in the shadows and what is concealed by the mask?
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Whoa, that's intense! I like the concept. The dark character seems like he'll get a chance to come out and be himself on Halloween. I desperately wonder what the last paragraph means! Does he really disappear forever, because there really is no tomorrow?
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You could always read to find out.
=P
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Interesting, I think I may have to read the unabridged version.
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Frightening!
So the murderer comes out during Halloween......spooky! I guess the character preys on innocent children trick-or-treating, which is disgusting. He needs to be locked up in an asylum in Europe somewhere.=) -
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It's... not quite that simple. I'd recommend the UNabridged version for clarification.
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Oohh I agree with what someone else commented that sentence in middle para is quite chilling. I like this teaser from your story and am intrigued to read some more - thanks for entering and good luck!
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Tonight you can lie and you can laugh and you can lose yourself for a while and then go back to being happy and stupid and normal tomorrow morning. But tonight is all that's left of my world. There is no tomorrow.
I thought this to be deeply disturbing. The concept of no tommorow always has and will play on my mind but the way that you chose to end it... it just yearns to be read and I will want to know what inspired you to write it.
GOOD LUCK
Blair- Temaria
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