Sample of the short story: My FLower, by:Alyana

I remember this day, I went for a walk with my own little girl, that was when I met Roger. We were outside the hospital of my own little flower. Where my only three year old baby girl stayed. Permitted a visit out of the hospital once a week, I took all the time outside that I could with her.21

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I closed my journal, my throat feeling slightly dry. I gazed at my beautiful, now ten year old baby girl and smiled sadly.
"Thank you for the story mommy, goodnight" she murmured in her near slumber. "goodnight dearest" I said to the sleeping girl, my little girl bathed in the hospitals white sheets. Roger moved up and kissed her forehead, "night night sweetie." he whispered to her.123

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Tears began to slide down my face, little drops of crystalline salt water. We lay there together, him cradling me as our tears mingled, bathed in white cloth and each others tears.16

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just a preview, please read the real one, it is much more touching

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  • Valkyrie silver member
    November 24, 2008

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    Awww...so good! I read the full story and really enjoyed it. This teaser is very reminiscent of the feel of the original. It was an awesome story!


  • Melancholic Smile
    October 8, 2008

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    I'm sure I read the full version of this in a previous contest and really enjoyed it The teaser makes sense to me because I remember the full version and what happens. I still like this a lot - thanks for entering and good luck


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    September 27, 2008

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    I am already touched.
    This sounds so sad.
    Please sent me a link for the story itself.
    What inspired you to write this story?
    I found it even in all its shortness to take control of me.
    I want to know..............

    GOOD LUCK

    Temaria- Blair

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