For My Best Friend - Teaser

"Sarah? Sarah!"1

I look over to William who is holding poor Sarah tenderly in his arms. They would have looked adorable and sent waves of jealousy through me if it wasn't for the fact that I can feel that Sarah is dying, and for the look of her mangled body. She has lost consciousness by now and the future looks grim for all of us. Her legs and lower half of her body are completely crushed; the landslide had come down too fast.2

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I double over suddenly, gasping for air. The portal is opening more; her soul is readying itself for the plunge. I have never been with someone throughout their whole death before. It is both fascinating and painful. I had always come right before someone dies, or, unable to stand the pain, left before the portal got large enough. I grit my teeth as another wave of pain courses through my brain. I feel a pair of eyes resting sharply on the back of my head.4

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"Amanda!" she cries, tackling my body with hers, "No! How could you do this?"6

"Sarah?" William asks tentatively, after a moment, "Is that you?"7

"Yes William," she sobs, still hanging over my body, "But Amanda is gone. She took my place."8

"I know," he replies, walking over he puts a hand on her shoulder, "And we'll never be able to repay her."

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A beginning, middle and ending paragraph of my story "For My Best Friend."
http://storywrite.com/story/192398

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  • Valkyrie silver member
    November 24, 2008

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    Oh wow...what a great story! That's true friendship! And the portal, and the being aroung for parts of deaths...fascinating stuff.


  • Melancholic Smile
    October 8, 2008

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    It was a little confusing but I expected that when asking for only 3 para's. I liked the opening para about the landslide and the scene of Sarah dying. I wasn't too sure what was happening in the 2nd para about the portal so I am intrigued now to read some more. Then I was even more confused in the last para when it had started with Sarah dying then she is alive again and Amanda has gone - I guess I will need to read it all to find out more!! Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    September 27, 2008

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    What kind of story is it?
    What inspired you to write it?
    I did enjoy this cause it was def' a teaser I wanted to know more.
    But is was a tad confusing... not to distracting though XD

    GOOD LUCK
    Temaria Blair