II line's in the fountian ain't II1
tolate is the waydio he doesn't know2
II Lan's is the seeter3
II Lan's is the way4
II Lan's is the Vaydio5
II Lan's is the Sea6
Toll Lan is a Vadio7
TollLan is a V8
Toll Lan is a Vadio9
toll Lan it's a see10
Tell Lee in i ain't the high holy sea's11
telleein i ain't the filo see see see12
So, go A way13
and go A way and see14
I ain't the mighty warrior15
i ain't the mighty see16
II Lon's is the waydio17
II Lon's is the see18
II Lon' is the radio19
i never god to see20
Sail away i said21
sail away that you see22
and i'll be at II Lon23
and that's the end of the sea.
Author notes
91 jp 1
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by MalevolentDesire.
750 points, ended November 2, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Tell him to see.
Comments
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Strange..
it was like a riddler on speed.
Some made sense while other parts were one giant blur of well ramble.
The pictures are works of art and I ma sure even with the word account that you could of produced something much spicier than this.
A little dissapointing...
but regardless.
GOOD LUCK
Temaria - Blair
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To be honest, I don't even know where to begin, but I'll do my best.
You have failed to adhere to the word count. I realise that writing for a picture can be hard, but you should be able to put more words to it.
Secondly, we asked for your reason for picking the picture. I can barely figure out which picture you chose, let alone why you did such.
Now, it may seem I'm being harsh, and I admit that I probably am, but there are rules for a reason. We're looking for the best, most imaginative, creative pieces that could be written for these stories, and I'm afraid that yours just doesn't make it.
If you would like to edit it, and fix it up greatly, then by all means do.
Malevolent.
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