Dark, stormy clouds gathered above them. Thunder rumbled and lightning flashed. Ocean eyes locked together. Their souls were entwined.1
A sweet, intimate look passed between the captivated lovers. Rain pounded against the ground, drenching them. Their soaking wet clothes went unnoticed, though. They were too entranced by each other.2
"I missed you," the man whispered, strands of dark hair clinging to his face.3
"I missed you too," she replied, shivering.4
Warm arms enveloped the small girl. Wresting his head on top of hers, he took in the fresh, flowery scent of her shampoo. Just the fact that he was with her again overwhelmed him. Whenever he was without her, the world was cold and lonely. With her again and delicious possbilities arose.5
A calloused thumb stroked her cheek. She always made his life seem perfect.
A contest entry
- Not so new but definitely interesting by DuchessAura of Brie.
350 points, ended September 26, 2008, 19 entries
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Comments
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Cute, but a little cliche. I really like the imagery you created, and all the details you were able to fit into such a small amount of words. In most short shorts, you're only able to get the general vague idea of what's happening, but in your story I can actually see the scene in my mind. Great job =)
One thing, "wresting" should be resting.
Thanks for entering =)
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Awww! Its so adorable! Bravo darling!
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Oh, you definitely hit the word-limit there.
I was pretty impressed. 137 words isn't much ut I'd say you used it very well. 
-HT
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