The agony of suspicion

My Dearest Serena,1

Long are the hours that distance our next sweet kiss. Great is the distance between our hands, and the touch of your skin. But, distance tests not the strength of men's hearts, for the arms of love are not bound to the limits of how far a limb may stretch.2

In the dark hours of the night, I wonder what occupation you embark upon, to wile away your lonely hours. Many a letter has travelled to you, yet your replies find me not, regardless of my hearts beacon, pointing to Zion, that you may know where I breathe. I wonder perhaps, in my most solitary hours, whether the incandescence of your affection belongs to a new flame holder, and I weep for the chance of such a sad occurence.3

Should you leave your love, for another? This tender heart pines to know how your sweet sorrow is banished. Be it in the pressing of the lily, or the warm glow of the sun? Or, are the days of our love so dark as to make my mournful notion correct?4

Tell me, I beg of you.5

Does the voluptuous harbour of your thighs bear anchor to new sails? Does the pillow of your bosom sleep a new head in the small night hours?6

Darling, if it be so, I would have you tell me, for I cannot bear the suspicion, it places too terrible a weight upon my weary back.7

I should not leave this place, be it true, and you shall have your new Romeo. 8

Should your heart still belong to me, then it beats with the fury of Poseidon's temperance, and glows like Apollo in his prime. I pray for this, sweet Serena. I pray that your arms remain open to your love.9

If this be our last goodbye, then it is a farewell I long shall lament, for the best of my days die with our love. 10

Forever, 11

Theodore.   x x x
12

Luke 13

Author notes

This is about a Man far away from his love, plagued by nightmares of infidelity.

Luke

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  • Aedara-Wren
    June 17, 2005
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    this is a beautiful write in a wonderful traditional style, I love the traditional style of poetry and prose!!its an absolutely excellent piece of writing!!I wish someone would write to me like that so that I could rejoice in proving their fears incorrect!! Dara

  • HeartlessAddiction
    June 17, 2005
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    wow, that it really amazing and really heartfelt.


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    June 17, 2005
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    Check you out Casanova! ^^_^^

    You choose to write in the old style, with a classic theme. Not so easy, when the sentence structure and words are no longer really spoken this way. And yet, as I read it, I found now inconsistencies. You clearly knew what you were doing. A lovely little piece of work, that's highly believeable. A great little write.


  • sugs
    June 17, 2005
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    this is so beautiful,Long are the hours that distance our next sweet kiss. Great is the distance between our hands, and the touch of your skin.......
    you are poetic hons,
    it just flows
    amazing work dear
    keep writing more
    luv

  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 17, 2005
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    this is very beautiful write with lots of emotion within it. the flow is great and though a bit sad very beautiful
    love and light
    blaze

  • porthos
    June 17, 2005
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    this poem illustrates how the most wonderful thing in the world can lead to the most terrible...love and heartbreak.

  • Leannonsidhe
    June 17, 2005
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    Slaite

    Wow i wish someone loved me like that...beautiful! heart-wrenching i love it! write more!

  • Vickie J
    March 19, 2005
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    This is a stunning write! I felt like I opened one of my classic novels from the Elizabethian Age. This is flawless in my opinion. The words you chose to describe the emotions, the lovemaking, the lonelines amazed me. I am totally taken away by this masterpiece. vickie j


  • BabieJuliet69
    March 19, 2005
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    beautifully penned

    the depth of this write is beyond any measure. it was beautifully written and it steals the heart away to feel the writers pain as you read his words of love. i believe i will check out some of your other work because you are an amazing writer and i would love to read more of your works.

    Babie

  • Fiore
    March 19, 2005
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    this is very skillfully written...nice use of metaphor and the subject matter was well worded and tactfully dealt with- well done!


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    March 19, 2005
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    I don't really know what to say, but since I have already used a click, I will tell you I don't really know. It is all in the mind of the narrator, and he doen't know which way to go and is betting all sides. As to the style of writing, I can't really comment.

    Andy

  • TanyaB
    March 19, 2005
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    You write this as though you speak from personal experience. From your profile, you seem to be quite young, I am rather impressed that something this deep could be penned by someone who should not have had to experience this much yet. Well done!

  • Mellor
    March 19, 2005
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    This was so very beautifully written, truly touching. (How to word all the emotions this threw at me...) there's such a fine balance between unstoppable strength and shattering weakness in this Theodore, in the way he talks he shows of a man swimming in power and knowledge, yet in the subject matter, and what he is saying, he is drowning in helplessness, and knowledge.
    If this - "Does the voluptuous harbour of your thighs bear anchor to new sails? Does the pillow of your bosom sleep a new head in the small night hours?" - wasn't worded exactly as it was, I wouldn't be at all interesting in this type of metaphor, there's always been something about ocean style metaphors that has bugged me, but seen as you put it as you did, this was perfect.

    Very skilfully written, beautiful, well done
    Mellor x

  • Black Messiah
    March 19, 2005
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    Hey, thanks for your comment. I appreciate it!

    Luke

  • Mickie27
    March 19, 2005
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    Beautifully written although a very serious subject matter you have written it so well. The message comes through. There is sadness in this too and much emotion. Really well written.

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