Out of Coverage area

“Hello?”1

...2

“Hey Dan! It's you!”3

...?4

“No, I'm driving.”5

...!6

“Don't be my mother! I can talk and dr- SHIT!! ”7

...?8

...?!9

...?!

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A story in 17.3 words, approximately. Thank you Aura for this wonderful and challenging concept!

A contest entry

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  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 23, 2008

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    loved it, lol, great job, very cool. I hate losing reception on my phone, grr... great job!! Good luck in the contests (including mine =DD)

    Dani

    • Kirin
      September 23, 2008
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      grrr it is! Thank you for hosting

  • MsAlee
    September 20, 2008

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    LOL!!! I love it. It sucks to be cut off within any conversation just because of cell coverage. Good luck!

    • Kirin
      September 20, 2008

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      Yeah.. Thats the point.. The other one never knew if it was coverage problem or some accident. Glad you liked it. Thank you!

  • Stryke Greeters member
    September 20, 2008

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    Don't you just hate when this happens! Totally true which makes it good! good luck in the contest!

    • Kirin
      September 20, 2008
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      Thanks Rian, for the applause. Glad you liked it!

  • Valkyrie
    September 20, 2008

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    It's bloody brilliant!
    I loved how you used just one side of the convo to extend the story further within your word limit. It's great, it's clever, and I love it. I hope you win something in the contest for this marvelous effort.

    • Kirin
      September 20, 2008
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      Thank you very much. Glad to see someone appreciating the technique. I didn't write it for any award, though. I wrote it entirely for the pleasure of writing.......Hahahahaha...Rofl... Sorry, couldn't help it

  • Kartz
    September 19, 2008
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    Rotfl!

    Too good. Inimitably Kirin@Mani!

    • Kirin
      September 19, 2008
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      Just now looked up 'inimitably'. Thank you very much

  • DuchessAura of Brie
    September 19, 2008

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    Hahah! I loved it =) This was very creative and original, and you made wonderful use of the limiting words =) Thanks for entering!

    • Kirin
      September 19, 2008
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      Thank you very much. Glad you liked it. May you get some great entries in the contest!!

  • matangimawley
    September 19, 2008
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    brill!

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