Men on the train1
Lean their heads2
Out the window3
Ogling, ogling4
Looking at the girls5
Who want to flirt6
Not get close7
Want to get married8
Don't like men9
Just want to be10
Validated11
Flowers grow12
Sturdy, steady rows13
Their petals ragged14
In spots15
Tired, droopy16
In others17
They are bright18
Fragrant, pulsing19
With juicy bright20
Life forces21
Pet shop window22
Cloudy with hope23
The tiny, quivering24
Panting bodies25
Beige back and white26
Barking, barking27
Calling to those28
People who pass29
Take me, hold me30
Love me31
We are sprouting.
A contest entry
- poetry by trekkergirl.
175 points, ended December 10, 2008, 101 entries
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Comments
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This is a very interesting and creative write that you have here. I like the part about the puppies in the window. And when you say take me, hold me, love me... well I can see the little puppies looking up at the people just saying this. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering this into my contest.
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Some great phrases here...cloudy with hope in particular. I also like how the women are indecisive and likely of differing opinions about men.
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Yes, we sure are. Very indecisive!
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Heh heh heh... 'Observation' is a noun; it'll tell you what's going down! Well written, there...
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Yes, observation is a noun, lol!
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Fantastic. I love how you showed that all is alike in wanting something and growing from what we were.
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Yes, I love comparison and contrast!
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Very cool
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Thank you, hun!
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