The fly

A beautiful summer day:1

'What a wonderful day,2

a picnic on the field?'3

'Of course my friend,4

the best thing to do'5

'So then let's pack up our things,6

and leave right away'7

.8

.9

.10

'What joy to lie here,11

no worries at all!'12

'You're absolutely right,13

I'll take a short nap'14

'Yeah I'm kinda tired to,15

I'll join you.'16

.17

.18

.19

'Damn I can't sleep,20

can you?'21

'the fly is here to,22

I'll slice the little bitch!'23

'C'mon.. hit her,24

don't be so clumsy!'25

'Fuck it,I am!26

You try...Smart ass'27

'Damn she got away,28

at least She's gone...'29

'ok if you say so,30

let's get some sleep'31

.32

.33

.34

'Uh...She's still here35

let's kill her now'36

'You can't kill her,37

you're to clumbsy!'38

'At least I'll try,39

you stupid kangoroo!'40

'oh,now i'm the kangoroo,41

any reason?42

'you were hopping around,43

trying to catch the little beast.'44

'you know what,45

fuck you!'46

'oh yeah?47

fuck you too!'48

And so they argued and started hating each other....49

Author notes

lol....i suck!!!!

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  • DistantWorld
    March 24, 2005
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    Don't say you suck. I liked it all the way up to the point they started fighting, then I laughed. This was very good, not many writerrs have the compacity to write deep poetry, and then top it of with some doodling like this. very amusing and I loved it.