What makes a person who they are?
Discriminate against me please
Feel free to throw your sticks and stones
Beat me on the streets to bleed
Strangle me with questions
Laugh within my truths
Edge away from the freak show
Do I ever discriminate against you?
What if I was someone?
Different, no disguise
Would that make you hate me more?
Or make me bury me inside?
What if on the outside?
Was not what's felt within
What if I was born a male?
Inside a Females skin
I cry because I hate this
I lie to save them all
When really I am just like you
Another heart they tore
Author notes
Hay dude: hope this is what you are looking for.
A heart felt poem.
Tried to be honest with you.
If not dude just let me know.
Yeah 
Thanks
~Blake~
Be nice for some comments !!!
A contest entry
- I want some good poems by Fervent-Author.
209 points, ended September 29, 2008, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Give me some honest feeback ^.^
Comments
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I wanted to say something.....but what can I say that hasn`t been allready said? I love it, it`s beautifull but you allready know that.
D.D.
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That's cool. I can sense honesty in it. Like something real, if you know what I mean. I like the line 'laugh within my truths'.
Once again, amazing. -
That was definatly heart touching if yet beautiful.
I felt very warm inside and if this did'ent make you get a feeling...
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This was beautiful, and sadly, so true. I could really feel the emotion in this, so strong it was practically jumping out of the page at me. Really nice piece, and you did a superb job on it. Everyone should be able to live life their own way, without fear of what repirsal they might get, or what discrimination, but sadly, this is not the way of the world. But good luck for the contest, and my best wishes for the future!!!!
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This was kinda sad to me. Kind of like a pouring out. Great job with it...
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This was amazing in the descriptive way you wrote it,amazingly good job.
Echo -
wow.
Great rhythm, beautifuly writen.
Great flow. I can't make mine rhym much lately but...man. i love it.
Keep it up!
cheers
Hunter~
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A very heart felt poem. I loved it! I'll give you some honest feedback! It is a very true poem and I find that whilst reading it, I felt you had spent a lot of time on this poem. It is very gripping poem. I'll keep a look out for more of your poems. Keep it up!
Lolly x -
That was moving... Very well written, I must say.
What if on the outside?
Was not what's felt within
What if I was born a male?
Inside a Females skin
I cry because I hate this
I lie to save them all
Loved those lines... Good luck with the contest
Peace, and have a nice day! -
YAY BLAKE !!!!!!!
I do feel you.
I know what you are going through.
I just think sometimes hun, you just gotta let all that drama go, you know?
Sometimes just stand in front of the world and tell the world to go F*** itself. You know what I am saying.
Life is to short.
You are beautiful
~ let a tranny mix it up~
Love you babes
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