I opened the door, my mornings coffee slippes from my grasp shattering on the hard wooden floor. My heart pounded, my breath quickened. Not a sound was heard no birds singing in the early hours no grasshoppers chirping in the grass. It was as if God him self understood and made the world stand still. 1
"Victoria."2
"Hello Brenden"3
Not another word was said for I pulled her into a ferce hug.
She looked at me gray eyes meeting brown. 4
"You waited?"5
"I promised I would" I replied my heart still racing.6
"I'm so sorry Brenden i'm so sorry"7
She began to cry cluching me her whole body shaking. I started to cry as well but not out of sadness or anger. It ws tears of joy not in my 29 years of my life have I been happyer then I was at that very moment. 8
"dont cry my love it's ok I love you Victoria I love you."9
"I love you too Brenden"10
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Great beginning! I can't wait to see the rest.
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Um, you have a few spelling mistakes. - ...listing to the looms...to slip there collars.... and this was a little strange- It was mid june and still cool in the morning, and I was getting chilly walking into my house i too one last look at the lake. 2
I like to give positive reviews, so I tryed my best to do so here....sorry for sounding like a teacher. I liked the idea, so I hope you'll continue.
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As you can tell all redone I was haveing trouble getting that firs part done getting the emotion ware I needed it to be.
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