Intro1
The lift opened. John Rock entered, pushed the button 25. While he's waiting in the lift he watches himself, combs his hair, because they were a little tousled. He hears the ding, and finds out he is already in the floor of his needs. The lift opens and already he sees a woman, sitting behind the desk and talking on the phone.2
He hears her conversation: »Honey, is it still on for tonight, at 8 like we agreed? I have to go now...I have work to do. Love you! Bye!« She takes a look in the book, takes a glimpse on the watch, turns towards John and starts: » Good day! You must be Mr. Rock, right?« He replies: » Good day to you to! Yes, you're right, my name's John. Did I come at a right time?« She thinks for a moment and says: » Just a moment, let me check on something.« She picks up the phone and just with the movement of her hand indicates John should enter.3
As John enters in the office, his eyes almost pop out, because it was like he had come to a mansion. Simmons notices that, laughs at his face and starts talking to him: »Welcome Mr. Rock! How are you? You seem perfectly normal.What brings you here?« he realises he forgot something and add: »Excuse me, my name is Jason Simmons and don't you dare calling me Mister!« and then he puts on a big smile waiting John's response. John immediately starts to communicate with his shrink. »Good day! I'm very good,thank you.. But I got some problems and I hoped you could help me.« Jason adds: »If you want we can start, or are you not ready yet?« »I have a few questions« »Yes,go ahead,ask.« Jason smiles and adds »You want to know how much I charge?« But John doesn't find it all that funny and looks at him with a deadly look and starts asking: »Firstly! Do you take your job seriously?« Jason surprised by the strange question goes into a deep thought. He looks at his patients eyes and sees nothing but determination. He looks at him for some time on and then he finally answers: »Yes! Why wouldn't I?« John looks at him and asks him another question: »Secondly! Are you aware you can't give away any information about our conversation?« Jason once again looks him with astonishment but he maneges to say something: »I haven't broken this rule till now, and I don't intend to! John, Why are you asking me these questions? I'll take them in notice for your further treatment, because panic like this is not normal!« John looks at him and smiles: »I'm just asking because my problems are private, and no-one should hear them! I just wanted to know if you're the right guy!« »I wouldn't gave our conversations away even if you had proved me you're an alien!«4
»OK then...we can start, I got the information I wanted.« says John. Jason pleased that he doesn't need to answer silly questions and with thoughts how his wallet will get bigger on the end of the month adds: »I'm ready! Sit down on this chair! We have about 45 minutes. You can start explaining the problem to me. » »I'd like to start with my past if you don't mind? I really can't just start with the core of the problem.« suggests John. »I see no problem with that, go one start talking.« »Listen to me carefully, or else you won't understand!« says John before he begins to tell.5
Author notes
just the start of my book....i like any comments good or bad...can i write?at least a bit?
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Comments
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Don't mean to be rude, but you did ask for corrections: tousled hair should be 'it was' not 'they were', 'on the floor', not 'in the floor', 'adds' not 'add'.
That's a really great effort, especially if English isn't you frist language. What IS your first language, if you don't mind me asking? Anyway, you can most definetly write, so don't give up. I was still intrigued and want to know more, so the slight mistakes are not a problem at all. -
Dang straight you can write. And especially with english as a second languege, you wrote this beautifully. I was on the edge of my seat and I can't wait for the next chapter. If you don't keep me updated I might just have to shoot you. Tis is so wonderful, keep exercising your amazing talent.
Bella
