The Crows Part 1

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It was just another Wednesday at the University of ___. Abby and Melissa decided to go for a walk in order to take advantage of the blistering 40-degree heat wave. The walk was uneventful, full of the usual gossip, homework complaints and drinking stories. However, they noticed an aberration towards the end of their journey. A large fraction of the sky was filled with crows, all flying towards the Soviet-inspired architecture of the academic podium. The bell rang, announcing the six o’clock hour. The sky burst into pink and yellow swirls. Abby stopped, entranced.                       2

“Wow, I’ve never seen so many crows at once. Isn’t it cool?”3

Melissa stopped short and gave one of her patented “what the hell are you on?” looks. 4

“It is not cool. This is the freakiest thing I’ve ever seen! It’s a sign of the apocalypse.” 5

Abby considered this for a moment. 6

“Maybe so. But it also fulfills like, every literary conceit ever. That has to count for something.”7

“You’re just a freaky English major. If podium collapses in the middle of the night I’m blaming you and your evil, literary powers.” 8

“But wouldn’t that mean classes are cancelled?”9

“No, it would mean you have control over the universe!”10

“Well I would warn you and a few other people ahead of time.”11

“Ok then.”12

They reached their destination and separated until it would be time for their gourmet meal in the dining hall. Melissa disappeared, shaking her head and muttering “English majors.”13

Epilogue14

The following morning, Abby awoke to an instant message from Melissa.15

“I saw about a hundred crows flying outside my window when I woke up. Don’t think I didn’t blame you.” 16

Author notes

This is just a short summary of an actual conversation I had with my friend. Not very deep. However, I'm working on a fictionalized version of it that hopefully will get done soon. As I'm definitely NOT a short story writer, any suggestions for this piece are greatly appreciated.

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  • Lacyte
    March 22, 2005
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    You have the makings of a lovely story here! Your use of the language is great and it makes for easy reading. Thanx for your comment on my story "New Concept"


  • PsydewaysTears
    March 16, 2005
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    Make it LONGER than a short story... much much longer!!! I want more, not to take away from how fun this was, but just to prolong the fun I had reading it. Convos are just so real and the ones that touch on touchy topics are just so golden-brimmed and mighty. I feel like I've passed through a gateway to a world I wasn't allowed in ever before. Awesome write!