I stared at this wonderful land. The beautiful waterfalls, shimmering lakes, 1
the tall mountains, the bright,shining sun and best of all, because is has rained, there was a beautiful rainbow arching across the sky. Oh forget about that but at the other side, there was a really steep cliff ending to nowhere.2
You will ask me then why did I come? Because, at first I thought this land was so beautiful I stared at the pictures of it, not the words. I was so foolish that I didn't even know there was a warning box. It said: Caution dangerous cliff in big words. And guess what, I didn't even notice one single bit.3
I was snapping photos when I tripped and dropped my camera. I found it near the other side. Whoops! I tripped on a rock, grabbed my camera and fell down into the really high cliff. I looked down and I was rushing down!4
It all happened so fast.5
I felt really wet when finaly, I dropped to a river, the current wasn't that strong so I swam to land. I found a blue jewel and I took it with me. I didn't know this would make me in big, big trouble.
Author notes
Hope it dosn't hurt!
I do have a bit of a idea what to do but any suggestions?
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Very exciting story. The structure of the story has improved. Just still need to mind the spelling of some words, such as "finaly" vs "finally".
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why did you talk about the tall mountaius. thank you for your story
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Very good! Very improved sentences. Creative, as usual. More matured than your previous stories, though I liked them better Keep writing!!
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This is just great. You have such a rich imagination. I love that last part about the jewel. Too bad for your camera. Really fun to read. I loved it.
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What is this about? Who is the main character or "I" as it says? lol! sounds good!
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Oh, I am never good at making names. Anyway, I will get a idea later. You can read it when you see it.
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