Adara is her name.Her mother picked it for it meant Beauty.Sitting in her room she weeps.Her best friend has past away tragically and suddenly.In the corner with her Alligator stuff animal she thinks of her friend.Dreamily she remembers her favorite week with Phaedra.1
"Adara!" Phaedra exclaimed."come over here and help me with these flowers." I ran over to carry them into the house. Reaching into our large cupboards i grabbed a good sized vase to put them in.2
"Aren't these the prettiest you have ever seen?"Phaedra asked while sniffing them lightly."I find them most definitely interesting looking"I Teased. Beautiful bright purple blue blossoms stared at me.3
Running them into my mothers room we set them on her bedside table.I quickly told her that we were to be outside,then we sped off.4
Grabbing my green bike while she got her blue one we raced to the corner before stopping."Where do you want to go today?"She asked."I believe that we should go and grab some Ice Cream!" We zipped past the houses knowing exactly where we were headed.5
Arriving there we jump off our bikes and wait in the small line."What flavor do you want?" I asked her."I think that i am just going to get a nice chocolate one with sprinkles, mmmmmm." "That sounds good to me!" I stepped up to the window and ordered our ice cream.6
We rode slowly with one hand as we peddled back to the house.7
Author notes
Just felt like writing...i think i kno where i am heading with this...
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I really like this, remembering things you did in the past with friends long gone, really a nice subject. I wish there was some kind of ending, unless is the way you intended for it to be, writing is for the author, not the critic. Good job, keep up the great work!
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WOW!! You have major talent I am speechless. Great write, I saw the title and feel in love at first sight and HAD to read this, and I am so glad I did. Great imagery, and meaning, and I liked the points you were got to get across. Great job , and keep writing, wouldn’t want the world to collapse without your brilliant mind! Best of wishes and great great job !!!!!!!!!!
Don't worry, I overlooked the errors, though they're were a few I wont mention them because the story was so so great! I'm not good at editing anyways hehe it could be perfect and I'm just stupid. Anyways great stry!!!!! Ill buy you're book when you're famous!!!!!! -
its good if you would add some more to it. a ending would be great and interesting. like Nomes said make it a little less formal.
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Where are you taking me? I would love to see some sort of ending. I think maybe you should go over your language too - do you really think your characters would speak so formally together even though they were good friends? Just a suggestion.
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