Hogwarts never ends-chapter 3

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Narcissa's P.O.V.2

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   I stared dreamily at Serverus. His sallow-skinned face was bent over and his nose was 2 inches from his parchment as he scribbled down a small portion of his homework essay. I peeked out of the window at random. Lupin, Peter, and Black were walking to Gryfyndor Tower. But where was their freind? I rolled up my Transfiguration essay and headed down to the common room.4

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I pulled on my silk dressing gown, when I saw a flash of light come from the window. I decided to Ignore it. As I curled up beneath my cozy green covers. What seemed to have been seconds of sleep, I was awoke by a startled yell of pain. As I dashed out of the dormitory, I almost slipped. The stairs had turned into a white slide. Curled up at the bottom was Lucius.6

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                                    Snape's P.O.V.8

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I rolled up my essay and shoved it in my bag. It was 9:00. I could probboly sneak a book into my dormitory and finish the essay. As I walked down the stairs, I felt like sombody was following me. As I reached the last flight of stairs, sombody hissed behind me,''Septusemptra''. I felt as though sombody had sliced me with a sword. I opened my eyes long enough to see a head with messy black hair and glasses.... 10

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  • Kylia Skydancer Greeters member
    September 13

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    *giggles*

    If Narcissa has a crush on Severus, i very much doubt she would describe his skin as "sallow." Also, if you're going to refer to Sirius and Remus by their last names, you should probably do the same with Peter in that sentence in the first paragraph.

    I think the spell you're looking for is "Sectumsempra" and depending on when this story is set (because I'm still not sure) James might not even know it. Snape uses it on him in fifth year and since , he made it up, he would have had to use it on someone for them to know it.


    • Horcruxes
      September 13
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      oKAY...

      As I said, it is 6th year, and if snape uses it on james in 5th, then james wouldd do it in 6th.


  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 7

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    It keeps getting better =DD great job, I can't wait to read more!! keep up the good work =DDD

    -Dani