The last rose

"Come on Nessa, Please?" Nick says"I really can't" i say and turn around to tell you the truth I really wanted to go out with him but couldn't babysitting, Ok confusion over. I'm Vanessa i have brown hair brown eyes and used to be really tall. And Nick is well my best friend he and i always hung out and talked and tonight he and i we're supposed to go on our weekly movie fest but of course having a baby brother and little sister to baby sit messed it up. "Put them to bed early and we can have our night," he says"You know what happens when I do that," they wake up early and scream"Fine," he says giveing up"It's one miss," i say"One we've been having our movie nights together everynight since," i cut him off"Pre-K i know but i can't it's big""Please just like let me over for one movie," he pleads and the bell rings"Maybe. I'll call you, we got to get to trig now," we run off to Trig before the next bell rang on my desk was a vase of roses and hibiscus' I look at them then around everyone just stared I walked to my desk Nick next to me I look at the vase"Ms. Slay is this yours?" Mr. Duggan asks"Um i guess,""Please get it out of the way put it in the lab," i walk over and put it in the lab and pluck out the card it readsDear Ms. Slay,I know you love poetry so here's my atmiet at itYou're eye's so round and bigLook straight into mineYou see me but not my loveI tried until the last pealt drops I will always love thouLove,Your secret

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  • hard* not had my baddd.

  • you need to put in some more spaces and put some more punchuation because it a little had to read hunny. but this story is amazing. i love it
    -your grammy.


  • angelaononchan
    September 12

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    I am not acusing you. Suggest you add more paragraphs and sometimes you forgot to press the space bar. Sounds cool about the music fest. Any way, who is nick? Please add more punchuation.Sorry about spelling. Can you tell the story more clearer? I don't really understand. It is like there is a musicfest at night but you are babysitting? And then you say to make the babies sleep earlier so you can go to the musicfest? If what I say is right, then it is ok.