Looking in your empty eyes
I notice the pain and hunger inside
I'm sorry i shout but i'm unheard
So empty, so scared about what i deserve1
Why did i do it
Why did they die
Why did god take that gift
Their innocent lives2
Its my fault
It must be
I was behind that wheel
But somtimes i feel just so unreal3
My friends
My sisters
We were so close
I'm sorry it's time for me to go4
Its punishment for what i did
It might realise the anger inside
I hope they rememeber me
But understand why, why i died
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Comments
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i love that. it has a lot of emotions in it.
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Hi and welcome to storywrite. You have an unusual bit of writing here. It is poignant and I do hope not a personal rendition of the aftermath of an automobile accident.
Naturally there are a lot of emotions surfacing when people die in accidents—you have expressed that very well
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Accidents however, are just that, accidents and no one intentionally sets out to create one. (Even a drunk driver isn’t acting by intent) When the accident causes fatalities, it’s horrible, but still placing blame doesn’t solve a thing.
You give the impression the driver here plans to take their own life—which will make a sad situation all the crueler for others.
You have a talent for expression, do continue to write.
Geri
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