I hold my tongue
A serpents mind
Secretive and hidden
Strikes at just the right time
I never meant to kill
Just the poison seeping in
I'd draw a dagger to myself
Then what good would that do me
I might be falling under
My wings all tangled, shreds
I know how to survive without you
Is that the message that you send
Release me from the chain I'm in
Hold me against my mind
I visioned so much for our future
I don't regret what I leave behind
Drifted away into the tide
A beauty of a man in my view
I send a message in a bottle
Hoping one day it will get to you
Some where along the way
The ink bled, salty, dry
You left me feeling hostile
Though I knew I'd never die
You can go your own way
I guarantee I am already gone
I tried to be with you for one more day
Though it seems connection is lost
You don't see me the way I see
I want so much for my future
Things that we could never be
Another door has opened
No revenge do I ever seek
I was only ever jealous once
That was when you did not see me
I can never be the woman you love
I don't think I ever was
I was lost in translation of myself
Yet I never once gave myself up
Change is for the better
I understand the truth today
We changed each other for the better
But I love you, I will not say
I find the word to precious
I hold it sacred in my heart
For the man I connect with wholly
Who I will death do us part
This is not a poem of hatred
Not one of jealousy
This is one for self respect
Respect for my integrity
Author notes
Sometimes in life you have to close one door ~ so that another can open.
One thing I have learned is "I love you" is a precious & sacred word and I will never use it again, unless I am certain.
In this case- for the poem this is about - I do in so many ways, but not the way I used to.
Another thing I have learned is dont give up hope with yourseld, you can wait forever, a life time to meet the person who you connect with in such a deep manner... and you know what- that day worth waiting eighteen years for 
I am blessed and I am in love.
This is a poem about letting go of what was - with no intention or suicide, or sorrow.
Enjoy
Blair
Honest opinions
Comments
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This was yet another well written piece of your writing, Blair. I think that the descriptions you put into it made it even better and I believe that the flow in this was amazing, as well. I think that you could still work on a different way to space your verses, but it's a style thing, so you might not want to.
Still, though, I think that you did this very well and I probably would not have done it any better... though I probably would have went a bit deeper and used a different stanza style. But both of those things depend on the writer and what they want to do.
Keep up the great work, Blair. I look forward to lots of your stuff in the near future.
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This is an excellent poem, Blair. Your feelings are conveyed strongly and clearly here with fantastic imagery. The fact that you can move on without regret or anger is so refreshing in this day and age of angst.
The title is fantastic as well and have good usage of nouns here to display your displeasure for the ending relationship.
For example:
My wings all tangled, shreds
I know how to survive without you
Is that the message that you send
Great lines!
And the ending:
For the man I connect with wholly
Who I will death do us part
This is not a poem of hatred
Not one of jealousy
This is one for self respect
Respect for my integrity
Again, the last two lines are excellent as you show that you are bigger than the other half of the relationship by being able to walk away with your head held high.
Excellent work!
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