a big lie that turned out to be a murder

what did i do1

did i have a clue2

i know its blue3

i know it was wrong4

he shoved along5

i knew it was not for long6

do i lie7

this is what im going to live bye8

i might die9

and i was very skilled10

the thing is i was thrilled11

i killed.12

one of my poems

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  • john reed bell
    September 7
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    well

    well it came to me it just did


  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    September 6
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    Hm...can't say it was detailed enough for me to get a clear picture, but it seems unique enough to intrigue. How did you come across this idea?

    -HT


  • Fallen.Angel.Hisana
    September 6
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    Hmm.....

    I like this poem. I wish there were just a little more to it. Like, what did you do, more setting, more...

    But it was good btw. It was good. Keep up the good work.

    ♥ Hisana ♥

    P.S. Just wondering though, what did you see or think about to come up with a poem like this?