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It's not a good day2
She says as the police3
Take him away4
Leaving her crying5
Alone6
Frightened and helpless.7
It will get better8
She is convincing herself9
Of this fact10
It will get better.11
It's been a long week12
She thinks as she13
Scrubs the vomit14
From the toilet15
Again16
As he snores.17
It will get better18
She is chanting to herself19
Praying, even begging20
It will get better.21
It's the worst year ever22
She cries as the blood23
Begins to flow24
Still his fists keep connecting25
Angrily26
With her head.27
It will get better!28
She is pleading29
Desperate, in agony30
It will get better!31
It's been a hard life32
She whispers as she33
Puts the bullets34
Into the gun she holds in her35
Hand36
Which trembles slightly.37
It will get better?38
She squeezes39
The trigger with finality40
It will get better…
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Comments
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Great, sad poem
Very sad, it even touched me. Is this based off of real life? Very interesting. I could feel the pain and hope in your words.=)
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It is based on real life. Obviously, I did not kill myself, but I was once in a DV situation as well as now being a counselor who works with people in these sort of situations.
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I agree with the comment below me.
This left me speechless!
I loved every detail of this poem, and it made me tear up a bit. Fantastic!!!!!
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Holy Cow! This was, wow, I'm speechless. Excellently done. It captures the reader. Wonderfully written here. You've got a talent. God Bless!
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Thank you so much, I think I need to read more poetry that is like this.
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This is bloody amazing...so much to this poem with very few lines.
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Thank you Master T, glad you like this. I have to admit out of all the poems I have shared with people, this one seems to get the most positive reaction.
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Dark and Beautiful
I really enjoy your poems. They are dark without being fake. You can tell you are speaking from an honest place. I think it is a hard thing to do. When someone writes a poem like that and is faking it you can tell, it comes off as whiny and melodramatic. Very brave and powerful work.
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Lol I am dark and definitely not fake, so thanks! Love your work too!
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I feel like reading this again and again... I admire the way you play with words and bring about emotion! Awesome...
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Thanks sweetie!
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I loved this! It was superbly done. It flowed very beautifully and really expressed the feelings. The repetitions of the words, the constant hope. Hope is all we really have. Hope and friends. I really liked this piece. Sad, and very effective, with a simple story conveyed easily and beautifully to the reader. Brilliant piece of work. Keep writing, this was really superb. I loved the way her hand trembled... Sorry to hear you went through some bad times, and very glad it ended more happily than this. Good luck for the future! Great job!
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Wow, thank you for putting so much thought into your response. I really enjoy your writing too, it's awesome. I am glad that my life took a turn for the better, too!
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