Babylon

A girl had a baby1

She was a baby herself2

She tried to raise the child3

But she couldn't keep up4

With the feedings, the diapers5

Cradle cap and spit up6

Besides, this baby was cramping her style.7

The girl put on a tank top8

Along with short shorts,9

Platform shoes and a gold cross10

She told her mother11

"I'm going out."12

And before her mother could protest,13

She slammed out the door.14

Too young to be a mother,15

Too big to be a child16

She went searching for something17

She couldn't explain18

What it was, or how19

She would know20

If she had found it.21

Of course, by now22

You probably know the story23

Without being told24

She came back months later25

The tank top now small26

Her mother not quite as patient27

This time around.28

A girl had a baby29

She was a baby herself...

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  • Fritz O skennick
    October 13

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    Profound & honest...

    Couldn't help but be moved by such a familiar story...
    Girls who so quickly want to be women & end up missing out on the transition & adventure in between...
    Well penned, well versed, Well Done!!!


  • MsAlee silver member
    September 6

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    So honest

    There are so many young ones that need to read this poem. They need to see the downside of having a baby so young (no matter how much it is loved, there is the life you would have had missing). Whenever I hear of a student being pregnant I never know what to say, should it be "Congratulations" or something else? I always wonder if they know what they are getting themselves into.


    • Sgs silver member
      September 6

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      Sadly I had a particular situation in mind when I wrote this one, and I know what you mean about "what do you say?"


  • Much-Dipstick
    September 4

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    This is also amazing. It really tells a story, in such an expressive way it amazes me. A common story too, or more common than it should be. And very sad. Again, a fantastic flow. You really seem to have grasped exactly how to structure your poems; they're so fluid. I am not an advanced poet, but I really enjoy good poetry and your work is some of the best I have seen on SW. Great job, please continue!


    • Sgs silver member
      September 6
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      Thank you hun, I do enjoy writing poetry and finding the "flow" as it comes to me.

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