A too short life 1
Full of strife2
Ended too fast3
Beauty didn’t last4
I loved you5
It really was true6
Maybe not enough7
Your life was rough8
Now your gone9
The end of a song10
You loved the sea11
So wild and free12
It took you away13
Nothing more to say.
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Yes very very short And very very sad. good luck!
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Awesome
Hmmm... It is very short, I must admit. But in that short period of time you explained what was going on. That, my friend, is very difficult to do! I commend you on that fact and i wish you luck in the judging...!
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sad, very sad.
im not sure if u intened the poem to end abrutly.
maybe to compare your friends life.
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Wow, sad but beautiful end there. I'm sorry to hear this. Great poem, btw.
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Thank you, it was very cathartic for me to write this one.
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Wow...
Well.... I'm sorry about your friend.... or your love... Brian. It must of been hard. But I know he's proud of you writing a great poem like this. The flow made you wanna read it again until your eyes gave out.
Really nice poem and a really great job!
♥ Hisana ♥
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Thank you so much for the comment, and yes he was a good friend but also an unrequited love type deal. I actually have had a few of those in my life that need writing about.
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