When a Platypus strikes!!!

Never listen to what others say, especially if it insults you.1

" Hey weirdo! Duckyotter!! Look here!"2

Don't look at them! What did I tell you? Why don't you listen to me?! This is my narrative. You either listen to me or get the hell away from me. About the insults? These are the backstreets. What else do you expect? That they'll respect me because I'm a platypus? Get real. Never talk back to those Tasmanian devils. They have a really short fuse; trust me. And don't show what you've got, unless you wanna lose it. Follow me closely and I'll take you out of this mess back to the streets. What am I doing here? Now, did I say I'm very allergic to questions, no? Then I'm very allergic to questions. Never ask one. That there is the main street. Lets go.3

Walk close to me. Don't look here and there. When I say 'Now', take a look right across the street and look down immediately. Now! Did you see them? Those are the Tasmanian tigers. The new law enforcers. They were never seen here before the incidents. Pretty strict, they are. They maul first and then ask questions. You wanna know why they are here? I'll show you. That crowd there is around the public radio. Lets get the latest news. Follow me closely. Don't get lost in the crowd. I won't come searching for you.4

"The break-in at the Govt. Food Reservoir yesterday, the third of such criminal activities in less than a week, has made it necessary that the special law enforcement unit of the Tasmanian Tigers be brought into the city. Citizens are advised to refrain from performing suspicious activities as the Tasmanian Tigers are a very fierce and would-care-for-nothing-and-fear-for-no-one group brought in especially to restore order in the City.5

"The Order of the Otters, the union of all otters in the city, has denied any involvement of an otter in yesterday's break-in, even though all the evidence point that way. It is to be noted that 'The Fellowship of the Fangs' and 'The Fraternity of the Flat Bills' had already denied any involvement in the previous break-ins into 'Govt. Bank' and 'Govt. Seafood', which were highly indicative of snakes' or spiders' involvement and ducks' involvement respectively. A special team of Wallabies is investigating the crimes and has claimed to have made some improvements. All Government institutions are on full alert..."6

It's getting better and better every day! I've been here just for a month and I'm liking it very much already. Time to leave though! Hey you! I'm talking to you. Lets go. Remember to keep your head down. I've got an important work to do. The tour is over. I'll let you go when we reach the bus stand. 7

Who do I think did those? I told you I don't like questions, but I like this one though. I'm telling you this because you are leaving the City in a few minutes and are never coming back. Get it?8

Nobody, I say nobody, accepts a platypus as one of his kind. Why? because I was born from an egg, have a bill and webbed feet like a duck, a body like an otter , a tail like a beaver, poisonous like a snake and yet none of those would get me anywhere. I'm the sole member of 'The Party of the Platypus'. I'm a nobody in this City, and you know what? I like it! I show them what I'm capable of, at the same time enjoy seeing them fight among themselves. They laugh at me because I'm different. I laugh at them because they are all same. The crimes; if everyone denies involvement then it seems nobody did them, and I'm a nobody. Coincidence? May be, but I don't believe in coincidences. These features of mine have isolated me from the society, yet made me what I am. This is my Gift. This is my Curse. Who am I? I'm Platypus!!9

Here comes the bus. Like I said, Don't ever come back, and remember, we never met. Farewell, my friend! Wish me luck, for I have a dam to destroy, and between you and me, the Beavers are innocent. Don't blame them. Good Bye!

Author notes

I've always loved to imagine being animal. Thanks WritersEffigy for this prompt. My fav author is Michael Crichton.

"They laugh because I'm different. I laugh because they're the same."
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  • tonialoise
    September 28

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    This was cute. I kind of knew half way through, but that didn't ruin it. Not something you would expect from the animal kingdom, so it's different but in a good way! Keep up the good work!

    p.6 seems to have a bit of a runon sentence that is a little confusing to read. Though the point comes across ok.


    • Kirin
      September 28
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      Thank you very much for the comment and the applause!!! Guess my hook hooked you into it!

      p6:I guess the Tv news anchors with their monotonous report influenced me there

      Thank you for liking!!


  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 27

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    ha, this made me giggle, hehe, great job, it was both dark ad kinda funny, maybe because it was about playtupus's, hehe, annywho, great job, loved it =DDD

    -Dani


    • Kirin
      September 27
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      Thanks Dani! Have tough time judging!!


  • xxxWhisper-Sorrowxxx
    September 15

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    Wow.. that was interesting! I really liked this one. Never read anything like this. I didn't find anything wrong with it. Thanks for entering!


    • Kirin
      September 15
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      Thanks for reading and commenting. Glad you liked it


  • DoozerDan silver member
    September 12

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    Mmm, very nice. I enjoyed the second person narrative, it certainly makes for an interesting read.

    I don't think I have anything to suggest that might need fixing, it all looked pretty good to me.

    Ummm... not much more to say, clever, flows nicely, nice touch of dark humour, very nice.



    • Kirin
      September 12
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      Thank you for reading, commenting and all the applause! I'm really glad you liked it


  • CrazySouthernGirl
    September 8
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    lol... very weird and random....


  • WritersEffigy gold member
    September 4
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    Bahahahah wonderful! Thanks for entering.
    Loved the narrative.


    • Kirin
      September 5
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      Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the prompt.

  • Kartz
    September 4

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    Hmmm...

    Well, there was nothing glaring but for what you have said in your notes; "I've always loved to imagine being animal."- I've always loved to imagine what it is to be an animal.

    this mess (and) back
    "That there is the main street"- That, over there, is the main street.

    So, nothing that important. Cherio. And yeah, I've replied to your comment at my page. Check it when you've time.


    • Kirin
      September 5
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      Yeah! This is more like it. Thank you. I've also added descriptions to 'The Beauty who slept too long', like you said.

  • Kartz
    September 4
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    Nice...

    Funny... Good imagination!


    • Kirin
      September 4
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      No suggestions from the Kartster?! Somethin fishy going on...hehe.. Thanks dude.. Glad you liked it...

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