Orochimaru's Plane Part seven Darkness (not done)

I sat there gazing into the darkness of silence, woudering what could be in his head. I swam through every ince of my own mind to determine what was he really doing. True, this cruse was on me and true, that I was no longer a real "human" anymore. But why look gloom and sad when you are as evil as the devil him self? Honestly, I thought it to be werid him acting like a saint would be nice to see too.1

I sighed heavly, layed down and let my eyes lids close to see no more than my own imaingation take over. I slept from what felt like an enternity but something woke me up from the dawn of my slumber a scream runing down the halls.2

"Help me, save me from this place!" 3

"Stop her she has to be killed!" That voice was a sound ninja's but the girl...was more of a man's deep voice. I shook my head,and said out lound.4

"Oh stup up girl your justu sucks more than Naruto's you ugly fat freak!"

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