Alba

Alba1

I touched her red lips 2

But Alba bleeds in my arms 3

Got lost in her venomous kiss4

But Alba bleeds in my arms 5

Drowned in those virgin waters 6

Ran away from the doomed shores7

Ran away from her sweet memories 8

From my sweet Alba that haunts my insanity 9

Carving shadowy images of your dead body10

Of our unconsumed love11

As I bleed 12

For you my sweet Alba 13

As I’m being torn apart from cruelty that bears your name14

From this lust that never ends 15

I just wanted to love you my sweet Alba16

Get lost inside you 17

Make you mine18

But now you’re gone with your sins19

I touched her dead body20

But Alba bleeds in my arms21

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  • amanda vampiress
    October 20

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    Wow! This was very well written! I like it! It was dark, sensual, and kinda romantic in some ways. My favorite line is ...As I'm being torn apart from cruelty that bears your name. I also seen imagery and alliteration, which is very pleasing to me! I really enjoyed reading this! Keep up the great work!


  • capitallights
    September 15
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    Good use of words, very poetic. Overall, good poem. Good writing

  • Sweet.Intoxication
    September 12
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    I thoroughly enjoyed this.
    I think it might'vebeen a nit abstract, because there's stuff in there I don't understand when I think about it, so I won't think about it!
    But I like abstractness, and if that's not what you were going for, well it was deep!
    Bravo


  • TNTrouble silver member
    September 9
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    Mmmm...very dark and sensual. I like this.


  • imagist
    September 5
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    this is spellbinding. great job on the poetry.

  • Kartz
    September 4

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    Wonderful... Truly wonderful.

    "From my sweet Alba that haunts my insanity

    Carving shadowy images of your dead body

    Of our unconsumed love

    As I bleed"

    I just hope writing this piece brought you some sense of peace

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