one the night of the end of the hour after 12 am their walked a weid and wild eyes looking at me from the near by station at the old GOLDEN INN. But you didn't know is how this story really started so let me take you back 3 days ago into the journey of this week of hell.1
September 5 1985 i walk home from school like every other kids in the near by town that i go to the city if LAS VEGAS, LAVADA the town of the land with-out water or rain over a mouth. The sky was heavy with wind and sun, but no rain o the land was dry as the back of my tong. Well walking home i seen a murder happen just across the street at the MS. and MR. EDWARDS home. From what i could see was every-thing was off the gun shoots want out and i ducked like any red blood American kid would do. Me looking out from under the bushes and looking at every little detail that want on in the house.
The two men pushed the body's into a big black van and started to well smoke a pack of smokes. They was talking and drinking while telling each other what to do with the body's of their Vitim's. So i started to ease out of the bushes and turn away from the scene and run, but some-one dog ran towards the bush and started to bark at me and i jumped up they looked at me and i looked at them and ran for dear life. The guy's started to run after me but they turned around and got into the van and chased me down.
I turned into a crowed part of the forcing them to slow down and i ran home and locked all my doors and called the cops. Soon as i called the cops a knock was on my door i didn't answer it fearing it was the men that was chasing me down the road. The police disbatcher came on the phone i told them the hold thing even the part where know i hear bagging on my front, back and side doors all away round. They told me stay cover and hide some where in the house. so i did i hide in the basement of my home.
I hear the sound of my saver com-in i made a sound of relax the big and long out of my mouth. The police busted down the door and asked to speak to the kid on the phone i popped out of the basement and said "here i am" the said "we hear-ed that you witness a murder and the men was com-in for you" i looked up at them and "all i was doin was walk-in home to do my homework before my mom gets home and know look at me seen something that was not to be seen or hear-ed and know i am running for my life bad luke right" the looked at me and said "we stay here until your mom come home and take you in and hold you'll and hide you until we find the men's that want your life".
Well my mom came home and she was scared out of her mind when i told everything and everything that had happen and. This would be the first day of the worst day of my life.2
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september 6 1985 the news of the double murder came to light and a possible witness to crime. Well the i knew that this was bad and so did the police and the FBI it was time to move me and my mom out of the town and so we did. As we was moving the naboir asked us where we was going my mom looked at them and said "my job made a claint and i want be home in 4 months so i am taking my son with me while i worked over-sease". The cops and uniformed FBI worked on moving us out of the town.4
We was ready to go and in the truck we g, but something bad happend someone leaked out the witness name my name DANIEL LEE BROWN. The son of BRENDIA DANA BROWN. Someone leaked it out and everyone knew it was the inside jobs a cop leaked it out and i was really in danger. But i was already out of town and in the little town called the GULF COST OF MISSISSIPPI. It was small and something new for me we was told to stay covered and no out burst of who and what you are.5
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september 7 1985 someone leaked to the media that was hiding in gulf cost of mississippi. Before we could find out the media was all over the place covering our front door and leading un to hearm and letting the killer know where we was at in the world. Know me and my mother was on the run again this time we took it to our self to make it happend this time we was on our owen.7
But we let the FBI know where we was all the time. Yep 3 days ago my life was cool and on the rise until a walk from school left me on the run for my life. And always a step more than the people that want to kill me. An turn me around the back side and slit me into 2 different peace. Well i let you know how the race against time is for or aginst me8
Author notes
well this is a story about a boy walks from home and see a murder and trys to run but at ever corner someone is telling where he is at every movement that he makes
well think about it
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I began to read this but the grammar and spelling errors made it so challenging to read I had to give up.
I'm going to have to DQ you from the contest as well. When I skimmed it, it didn't seem to go with any of the options either.
Sorry. Work on it a bit, and I'm sure it will be a great piece. -
this is interesting. i usually wont take the time to read such a long part.. but that starting caught my eye very nice

