it was so hard to take in a t one moment, but the next, i just was breathing again and it was so easy. 1
i had moved from a small town in alabama to a big city in california, where i would move in with my mom. as i gazed around monteray, i saw more people than i thought were on the face of the earth. it was so huge! 2
i was on the bus and i was supposed to see my mom at the aquarium. it was just five seconds after i realized it was my stop, that i saw my mom for the first time in three years.3
"mel! oh, melanie sweetheart! oh, i've missed you..." she said as we gave eachother bear hugs."hi, mom. what's going on? are we going inside the aquarium?" i asked. "no honey. we are going to go strait home. maybe another day." i sighed. it was a good thing for me, i was hyperventilating. "let me take some of that..." she said as she grabbed some of my luggage. "thanks mom." i simply said. 4
she then called a cab and we got inside. well, she got insinde. i tripped. "melanie? are you ok? i forgot how clumsy you are." she said. "yup, classic me." i said, annoyed. i got up and brushed my knees and put my wavy red hair back in a ponytail, revealing my bright green eyes. i got in the cab and closed the door, but as soon as i did, the driver sped off. since i didn't have time to buckle, another accident occured: i hit my head on the seat in front of me, causing a major headache. "ow, that hurt." i buckled up and muttered,"he's definetely not getting a tip."5
TO BE CONTINUED...
do ya think it's funny? do ya? do ya?
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I'd like this, if you simply used "I" and capital letters where they're supposed to be. I do believe that that is simple know-how, sorry. But it kills a good story like this when people miss out on grammar so heavily.
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sorry, just a habit... really hard to break from not capitalizing on poems. eek!
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