*The moon rose high above the clearing, as the soft breeze ran through your hair. Through your window you gazed at the dark sky, eyes puffy, and heart broken. You wipe off the remaining tears from your eyes. Your mind flooded with memories of him. Zack. His long-blond hair that was soft to the touch. His dazzling blue eyes that always pierced your heart, and his deep voice that made your heart throb.*1
"Why doesn't he love me anymore?" you wonder as the tears begin again. "He said he'd love me forever, and now he goes and dumps me!" You wish you could understand why guys do stuff like this just when you had begun to really and truly want to be in their arms forever. More memories go flooding through your mind. The way he kissed you just last week when you had been crying over something. The way he always held you tight and never let go until you wanted him to (which was never). The way his eyes lit up everytime you walked past eachother. The way he looked when he was in the sun, without a shirt on. Just the way he looked. You remembered everything about him - his eyes, his hair, his arms, and especially his hands. You always loved to hold those hands and curl your fingers around his. 2
The last time you let go was two days ago. He had been acting weird for a few days before that. You suspected something was up, but you never thought he'd break up with you! He loved you! "You know what I wish, Zack?" You say to the stars. "I wish that we were still together. I wish you could explain to me why you dumped me. I just want a good reason. But mostly, I want you to hold me and kiss me and say you love me one more time. Just ten more minutes with you and maybe, just maybe I'll be okay." 3
After wiping away your tears one last time, you decide to call him just to hear his voice. 4
"Hey Zack..." you trail off.5
"Hi." He doesn't sound too displeased with you calling him.6
"Um, I was just calling because..." You're too nervous to say anything else.7
"You were just calling because you wanted to hear my voice?" he guessed? Man, he still knew what you wanted!8
"Uh, yeah. I miss you." Why did you have to say things like this when you knew he didn't want you!!!9
"Well, honestly, I miss you too. I know I broke up with you, but I still love you. I thought you should know that," he whispers.10
"Why did you break up with me then?" you wonder.11
"I don't know. I just felt it wasn't right. But right now, when you called, I..." he stops talking for a minute. "You what?" "I had..." he hesitates again. Why was he not talking? What was he doing?12
"Is everything okay? Are you hurt or what?" You start to get really nervous.13
"Everythings fine now, but can you come over? I need to show you something." He finally decides to say.14
Ten minutes later you're sitting in his room holding him tightly and letting him cry. You'd never seen him like this. When you'd arrived, he had shown you something you'd never expected. There was a gun in his hand and ready to shoot. 15
That day was years ago. Now you are married to him and have four children. You loved this man you have so much that when you called it stopped him from doing something terrible. How you ended up together is a mystery. But now, Zack tells you he loves you everyday. When he kisses you with passion and holds you tightly, he's thanking you for loving him so much that day so long ago.
Author notes
Well, this is my first story, so I really hope you enjoy it. I thought I'd do a little twist in it even though that just kinda came when I was writing... lol
A contest entry
- Finish it. by Yoko.
539 points, ended September 26, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Well, it's my first story, I hope it's okay! :D
Comments
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Wow. That waws a biiiig twist in the end. Lol. This is your first story? Wow! You're realy gooooood! I love the details! I felt the emotions. It's great. You did a good job! Thanks for entering. Hehe, mew!
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Seriously? You liked it? Thanks!
lol A lot of people say that I have a thing with words. I've got a lot of poetry that people seem to like, but usually I think it's really bad. lol
thanks again!
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Lol. Yeah, I'm being seriouse. Lol. You write poetry? Cool.
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lol that's funny.. Yeah, I've got an allpoetry account. I think they're posted on my page? not sure though. lol
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Cool!
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