The Raven and The Girl

Once upon a time......1

there lived a little girl, and her name was Kerrie. She had black, curly hair... as dark as the Raven's wing, that fell down around her shoulders in springs, and the brightest blue eyes of any child. She was not a hyperactive child, but she did like to run and play as much as the next. Her parents loved her dearly, but they did not know how to control this little bundle of fun. She always had something to do, or somewhere to be, or something to be into.2

One day, as she was playing in the back yard with her dolls, she looked up and saw a bird flying in the sky. It landed in the tree in her backyard and stared at her, it's black eyes glinting in the sun's light. She blinked her bright blue eyes, and it blinked it's black eyes, then it opened it's black beak, for it 'twas a Raven, and it said to her, "Little girl, little girl, what is your name?" Kerrie, being a very curious and playful child, went over to the tree and sat at it's base, looking up at the Raven. "Dear Mr.Raven, my name is Kerrie. Why have you come here today and stared at me so?" He blinked his black eyes again, and flew down to the base of the tree, landing on the ground before her, he pranced around for a few moments, his black eyes glinting in the light, then he looked at her, and blinked his black eyes again. "Why, Dearest Kerrie, I have come to do this..." With the words barely out of his beak, he flew at her, pecking at her eyes mercilessly, within a few precious moments, she was left marred and blind. And that was that of little Kerrie. An end to her play, by the Raven...one day.3

Author notes

I know this is a -weird- story. It has not plot. I don't know where I was going with this. I just wrote it one day out of the blue. I don't know. *shrugs* Any suggestions on editing it and making it into something... please put them down.. maybe a reason the Raven came to her? I don't know. I'd love comments on this one.

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  • Memoriesxneverxfade
    March 12, 2005
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    FUN

    I like this story. It would be nice if it were longer but what you have is great. I am giving it a 10!!!!

  • MagicLady
    March 10, 2005
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    Yes, I would have to agree with you, it is weird. Poor little Kerrie, left blind and marred. There isn't much of a story line here, just some thoughts. You could develop it into something, I am sure, but for now, it is just an idea. Cheryl