Sibling Rivalry: Ice Cream Wars

"Touch that ice cream and die! It's mine!" Austin warned his brother, seeing the boy sneaking up behind him and approaching the counter where a bowl containing the last of the chocolate ice cream awaited his return. 1

Westly scowled then looked to his twin innocently. "I wasn’t going to take your ice cream." Austin's back was still turned to him and he took a couple more steps towards the treat. 2

"Wes, I'm warning you!" Austin growled, knowing his brother too well to believe him. After all, this was the last of the chocolate ice cream they were talking about. It would be a miracle if they didn't have an all out death match right in the kitchen for it. "Found it." Austin smiled triumphantly, pulling the chocolate syrup out from behind the milk. What was chocolate ice cream without chocolate syrup? He turned and the smirk was wiped right off his face. 3

There was Westly at the counter a spoonful of his precious ice cream in his mouth. His twin smiled shyly. "Is this yours?" And he dipped his spoon back into it again. 4

Austin fumed inwardly as he watched his brother take another bite. "Oh it's on now brother." He gasped pulling the cap off the syrup and aiming it at the boy. Westly swallowed the cold food with a gulp, he hadn't seen the chocolate sauce in Austin's hands until it was too late. With a muted squeal he dropped to the ground hoping to avoid the stream of goo. He was too slow as the sweet smelling liquid chocolate hit him in the face and hair. 5

He touched his battle wound and examined the chocolate now coating his fingers. "Austin!" He roared the look of shock replaced with fury as he stood and grabbed the spray house attached to the sink turning on the water he took aim at his wide eyed brother. Austin dropped the syrup bottle and tried to duck out of the hoses range. Still he felt the cool water drench his back as Westly hit him dead on. 6

Drenched, Austin wheeled around to glare at his doppelganger. "No you didn't!" His voice was as cold as the ice cream now left forgotten on the counter. 7

"Oh I did." Westly confirmed blowing on the front of the hose as if blowing off a smoking gun, chocolate still ran slowly down his face. 8

"I'm still the better looking one." Austin smirked watching his brother's reaction. Westly's hand clenched over the trigger to the hose in his anger induced shock. A fresh sprout of water hit him in the face. Austin burst into laughter as Westly growled a response. 9

"We look exactly the same you loser!" 10

"Yeah, I'm a loser, but the coolest loser you'll ever meet." Austin continued in hysteria. 11

Westly paid no attention the fact that he too was soaked and turned the stream of water back onto his brother. The laughter was wiped right off Austin's face as the water sprayed him again. 12

He dodged out of the way, or attempted too at least, "No fair I'm unarmed!" He yelled. 13

"Too bad!" Westly smirked taking aim once more at his brother, who was hiding behind the dining room table only ten feet away. 14

"Westly Benjamin!" A female voice shrieked from the doorway the boy froze at the usage of his middle name, "Don't. You. Even!" Their mother commanded. 15

"Oops." Westly choked. 16

"Where's Austin?" She demanded still enraged by the scene that had met her upon her arrival home. 17

"Here." Austin gave a hesitant smile as he rose up from behind the table so she could see him. 18

She caught sight of his dripping hair and sighed. "Boys what have I told you about turning my house into a battle ground?" 19

They looked at her and then to each other. "Don't?" They replied together. 20

"Exactly, don't." She looked exasperatedly to them again. "Westly is that chocolate in your hair." 21

"Probably." He admitted. 22

"I don't want to know." Their mother shook her head and turned around. "I'm going to Ms. Walter's house. I want the kitchen spotless by the time I get back!" She threatened. 23

"Yes ma'am." The boys saluted her as she turned to walk out the door again. 24

"And Westly, wash the chocolate out of your hair outside, I don't want a repeat of last time." 25

Austin snickered in the background as his brother flushed. The last time had been peanut butter, and the shower was covered in it by the time he was done. 26

"Alright." The boy agreed. 27

"See you again in an hour." Their mother warned one last time before leaving. 28

Austin started with his ice cream. The prize of the fight had all but turned into chocolate soup. "So much for that." He sighed washing it out down the drain.

Author notes

used the quote: Yeah, I'm a loser but the coolest loser you'll ever meet

for contest: My favorite song is Animal I Have Become by Three Days Grace.

My user name is Six-Feet-Underwater

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  • Savage
    March 7

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    Ha! Oh man is this funny. You. Are. A. Master. This is funny, interesting... funny, well written... funny, excellent!

    Did you get inspired for this by something?
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    February 27

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    Hi!

    This story is being considered for publication in the Storywrite anthology. If you'd like this story included, please apply to this group:

    http://storywrite.com/group/info/Storywrite%20Anthology%20Volume%20One?stay=1


    This story is well written, humorous, and quite entertaining. I very much enjoyed the read.

    p17 upon (her) arrival

    p26 was (covered) in


    Andy


  • Novaren
    October 11, 2008

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    Very amusing to read and I have to thanks the stars that I don't have to deal with that in real life^^

    Also love the way that everyone ended up being the loser^^


  • ainshbu
    September 28, 2008
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    tsk, tsk. such a waste of perfectly good ice cream.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • ainshbu
    September 28, 2008
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    this is like me and my brothers but then they all gang up on me i luv this


  • Valkyrie silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    I'd so fight over chocolate ice cream. Especially if I had a twin! Only one of those identical mouths should get some! Ban cloning! AHAHHAHA!
    The best part was at the end how neither of them got any more of it because it was full of water! Hee hee! I guess the moral is, don't fight with anything you want to get into your food?


  • Taliesa silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    Oh-sorry-I can't read this blue on a black background. from the first paragraph, I thought it sounded pretty goo


  • JessicaMadden
    September 25, 2008
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    Not a bad story. Mmm, chocolate, the best flavour in the world.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • DeathNoteYaoi
    September 22, 2008

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    Yep this story is A LOL welldone hehehe i wish i had a twin sigh we could rule the world anyway .... Great story

    DNY--


  • LittleMissChrissie
    September 20, 2008

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    This was totally random and original and I loved it. It was very funny and I can't even count how many times I've had that fight with one of my brothers or my cousins over who gets the last of the icecream, pizza, anything... hahaha. It was hysterically funnny. Well done!

    Only a few grammatical and spelling errors, but it was just so good!

    Chrissie

    • Six-Feet-Underwater
      September 21, 2008
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      Thanks, I've neared the fight with my younger sister lol, nothing as drastic as destroying the house though lol.


  • Dassy
    September 18, 2008

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    That was awesome and really creative. omj u should write a story based on the song Zombies ate my neighbors! I LOVE THAT SONG NOW! THNX FOR GETTING ME ADDICTED!


  • Fritz O skennick
    September 11, 2008

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    Great stuff...

    Great narrative, rhythm & flow...
    Great characterisation & I sense you had fun writing it & building the scenerio...
    Another fantastic & captivating write...
    Well done!!!


  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 10, 2008

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    HEYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you stole my back ground, and used it before I could, 'pouts' lol, I think i've already commented this story 'scrolls down to check' Yepp!! good job!!
    hehe =DD

    -Your friendly neighborhood Dann(spider-pig, spider-pig... hehe, sorry, great story =DDD)


  • Dawn Bon
    September 8, 2008
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    well someone is a great writter!!


  • tonialoise
    September 7, 2008

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    "probably." Got a decent chuckle out of me

    I can just see the boys standing there a mess with the mother looking down. Fun scene!

    paragraph 26 is that supposed to be "covered" ?


  • Hellcat Metal
    September 5, 2008
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    Wasn't exactly what I was looking for but thanks for entering. It was a good story.

  • Elphinstone
    September 3, 2008

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    Nice

    my sis and I fight all the time, but not quite that bad, which is lucky. lol. Anyways, I dont really think that this is random enough to win, but it is an excellant piece of work. Keep writing

    • Six-Feet-Underwater
      September 3, 2008
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      Hehe thanks
      Yeah, me and my sis fight all the time...we've never pulled the kitchen hose out on each other or food, but we've used sticks and water bottles...

  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 1, 2008
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    Lmao, nice!! good job ink, hehe!!! I love the story, great job!! I noticed a few things though,

    paragraph three, 'After all (,) this was the last of the chocolate ice cream they were talking about.' you forgot the comma. same paragraph, 'have a all out' the 'a' is supposed to be 'an'

    paragraph 16, 'Westly chocked' 'chocked' is meant to be 'choked', right??

    So, other than that, great job!! and good luck in the contest, even though I'm competing against you, lol =DD

    -Dani


  • ice wolf Greeters member
    September 1, 2008

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    You did a really really good job with this. Interesting idea. Twins fighting over ice cream. Though, chocolate ice cream is definately worth it. Especially blue bell dutch chocolate. Anyways, thanks for entering and good luck.

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