Jack

Twilight.  The light fades and I sit here on the roof tops watching, and waiting. What am I waiting for you ask.  I ask myself the same thing each and every night.  Yet, no answer have I found.  That is I haven't found one that satisfies.1

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Perhaps I should begin at the beginning. It started a few weeks back. I'm not sure of the exact time as it gets complicated. I was waiting for an interview, for a new position with the company I work for.  Anyway, a young women bumps into me. (Not, really a shocker or any thing right?)  Except, when I look into her eye's I see something.  It was almost like looking into the eye's of... well an animal.  I know that sounds crazy, but I swear it's true.  At any rate she apologizes and we make small talk.  Next thing I know she's asking me out. ( Great right?  Not if your married! Yet, I accept.)3

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So, the girl leaves; an attractive young red head I may add; and I have my interview. I go home that night and see my lovely wife of fifteen years, and play with my children. In fact I forget all about my encounter with the girl and our date.5

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Well, things go a little strange next.  I wake up in the middle of the night and feel restless.  I want to go out and see the night.  I want to go and play in the moonlight.  I know crazy, but I cant help myself.  I go out and walk to the park with the idea that the night air will cool me down, and I'll go to sleep.  Wrong.  I'm outside for about an hour and feeling pretty good.  Next thing I know I'm at the ravine.  I don't even hesitate, I just keep walking.7

After that I'm not sure what happened.  All I know is I found myself at home in bed beside my wife and it's time to go to work.8

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Did I dream it?  What's going on?  I have no answers, so I go to work and try to have a normal day like all the rest.  As I sit at my desk I find an envelope sitting there like a dark stain.  I describe it this way because the paper is blood red.  How, one finds a blood red envelope is anyone's guess. Yet, my first instinct is someone is playing a joke of some sort on me.  A sick one granted, but a joke none the less.  I hesitate a few moments, but decide to open it.  Inside I find a note.  It's written on plain white paper, a strange contrast to the envelope.  I scan the quick lines written there in smooth flowing script.  The handwriting is so delicate and alluring that it's almost hypnotising.  10

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This is what's written on the page:12

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Hi, Lover;14

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You really are the animal I knew you could be.  Same place tonight.16

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Your Beast.18

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A.20

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I starehard at the not.  Who is this person?  I didn't meet anyone last night.  I went for a walk true, but... that was all.  Wasn't it?22

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I have a hard time at work that day.  That night I jump at everything.  My name, the sight of my wife, my children.  It all sets me on edge.  Was I having an affair, and not aware of it?  How, could I do this?  I couldn't tell anyone for fear it was all real.  I love my wife, but I couldn't stand the thought of losing her, and her not understanding, that I was losing my mind. (At least that seems to be the only logical answer.)24

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That night I had a similar night to the previous one.  Except this time when I woke up I was in the shower.  I had scratches on my arms, and my back felt raw.  As, well I had an inexplicable desire for meat.  But, not just any meat. NO... I wanted it to be raw.  Yet, that's not quite right either.  It was more like I needed to kill something and eat it.  No... that's not quite right either.  I wanted to feel that something die as I devoured it.  I ran from my shower and threw up.  My rational mind trying to tell me that I was insane.  Yet, a darker part of me smiled and told me to relish these thoughts.26

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I skipped work that day.  I told everyone I was ill.  My Wife (God love her), believed me and wanted to stay home.  I told he no that I'd be fine, and I just needed some rest.  The children, all gave me a kiss good bye and  bugged me about skipping.  I smiled and played the role of a good father.  Yet, my thoughts weren't about being a good Daddy.28

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I wanted to leave the house and end these mad thoughts once and for all.  Suicide.  Yes; I was considering it.  I was desperate.  And just as I thought it maybe a rational thought the phone rang.30

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I stared at it, and almost screamed.  I waited for a second ring.  I waited for a long time, yet it didn't come.  My mind began to swim.  I'm not one for paranoia normally, however I was becoming that way.  Time seemed to slip away and I took a nap.  No sooner than a minute had passed when I heard a knock at the door.32

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I went to the door in my robe and answered.  Standing there was the young women from a few day ago.  Her red hair shining in the sun with silver drops of water caught in the strands. Her face, so radiant and beautiful that I couldn't speak.  I couldn't speak even as she walked into my living room. I slowly closed the door and mutely followed her.34

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"Miss me." she whispered.36

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Her voice was like a low growl, but to me it was music.  I fell into her arms crying like a new born baby.  She made comforting sounds and rubbed my back.  Then she kissed me and said it's time.38

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I looked at her with a strange look on face. Not knowing what she meant.  She smiled and kissed me, then gave me a little nip on my lip.  As the blood entered my throat I groaned and kissed her back hard. So, hard I bruised he lips against mine.  That kiss lasted a long time, and, yet it was no time at all.40

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We soon broke our kiss, and she took my hand.  I hesitated, but a second as she kissed my kneck and nipped at my veins, and then my ear. 42

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"Your one of us Jack.  You've alway's been one of us!"  Her voice echoed in my ears with lust and longing.  I was completely seduced.44

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So I went.  I left everything behind.  Everyone, probably believes me dead or worse.  I can't go back.  I, forget who I'am.  Every night as the moon rises it gets worse.  I have moments like now where I remeber, but soon it fades and it's hard, even painful to remeber.  I write this so maybe my family will know the truth.  I doubt it but I try.  What's my new life like?46

I  don't know.  At least I can't remeber to write it.....47

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Jack's gone people.  Jack has gone to sleep.  But, we like to play.   We like to go out at night, under the moon.  Don't worry we will keep Jack safe. Oh, and you can have his note as well.  We don't mind. Got to run now.  We hear their voices.  Voices, that call in the night.  Say night, night, Jack.  It's time to play.  Time to play in the moonlight!  49

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  • May Kingston
    January 31

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    This story was really good. I thought it was a great idea qand I love the description, but there were some grammatical errors. Maybe you should describe his human life a little more before he goes off with the red-haired woman.

    beginning: 5, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Arcos
    January 9

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    I have to say, I love the psychology going on here. This is very interesting, and I'm not even into the vampire/werewolf type of thing. I would have like to have seen what Jack was like before his transformation however, get a feel for him.

    All in all a very fun read. Good work!

  • Vampwolf
    November 3, 2008
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    Sorry about the problems people had reading this. I actually just threw this together and posted it. I didn't evern edit it. So... I know it's kind of bad in that way. However, I hope it was enjoyable anyway.


  • dark-fantasies
    October 31, 2008

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    Nice work I really like the ending of this; it reminds me of some creepy fairytale. The only thing that irked me about the story though was your tenses. You started in present then switched to past quite a lot, and I thought everything would've flowed better if you had kept it all in past tense. It was kinda choppy to read, so I got distracted a lot, but your storyline was interesting enough to keep me reading. I would've liked more detail about the characters too, since you didn't describe them that much I kinda found it hard to imagine them. The beginning of this was perfect in capturing interest and creating atmosphere, and the ending finsihed off everything really nicely. A good effort.

  • Vampwolf
    September 13, 2008
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    Thanks to everyone who has read my story. Sorry about the big block style. I wrote it properly, but when I posted it; it came out the way you see it.


  • Emikins
    September 13, 2008
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    I adored this.

    First person isn't something I am used to writing, or even reading, but i think you really captured the essence of a person and I really felt like someone was confessing something to me in dingy pub corner over some bad alcohol. A fuzzy and warm way to feel.

    Only issue I had with it was that because it is all one big chunk, it was harder to read.


  • Eresipel
    September 13, 2008
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    Ooh. Very nice. Loved the way Jack was so confused about what was going on. Very good.


  • GrimDeath
    August 31, 2008
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    Very well written. Very interesting, I liked it. Thank you for entering and good luck.

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