SR murders-23


Chapter twenty-three1

On Saturday the storm held off until evening. Then with an early darkness came the deluge, between the lightening crackling in the sky and the thunder exploding in their ears the boaters made a joint decision to return to the mainland. So they were having dinner in The Crabby Shack by eight and admiring the wrath of nature from the safer distance on shore.2

Newspaper was spread across the wooden plank table and on top of it were clean brown paper bags. Stacks of tan paper napkins were piled to one side and a caldron of drawn butter was centered on the table. Nutcrackers, picks and prongs with a small tub for the butter, if you wished to disguise the fabulous taste of the ugly creatures, were supplied to each dinner. Sandy had a small salad but the guys settled for messy corn on the cob to tie in with cave style meal. Everybody had beer.3

When the steamed crab legs were dumped ceremoniously on the table Sandy yelped. The guys laughed enjoying the young lady’s response, this was comical relief compared to her fearful reaction to the storm.4

An attractive blonde lady, several years Sandy’s senior sat down beside her and smiled indulgently. “Wretched way to eat dear—you feel rather barbaric don’t you? But the taste is well worth it.” 5

Her male companion circled around the end of the table, parked across from her and next to Neil Harris. “Ray Detragleia,” he said and offered his hand to Neil and then Joe. “My wife Carmen.”6

Joe reached over to accept the gesture and grinned. Judge Detragleia had dressed down, the jean shorts, navy- tee and sneakers were in style with his much younger wife’s hip-hugging shorts and cut off belly shirt. Still, Joe recognized the gray haired tyrant he been called to testify before countless times. Detragleia hadn’t said judge so Joe only acknowledge with “Ray. Joe Farley, Neil Harris and Sandy Hart.”7

“The storm drive you off the water to?” Carmen asked.8

“That ocean can be wicked scary.” Sandy’s pretended shiver made everyone laugh. 9

Carmen and Ray proved to be extremely talented at hosting any event. The evening moved along with the pleasant easy-going camaraderie of strangers coming together in a casual atmosphere of good food and amusing chatter. The two women were soon exchanging make-up tips and the best shopping news. The guys found common ground in boating, and sports trivia. Before the night ended promises were made to meet again which ultimately wouldn’t be kept.10

Joe let Neil drop Sandy off not only because he’d picked her up but, because it made him feel less committed.11

The storm continued well into the early morning hours of Sunday and even the air conditioner couldn’t prevent its noise from disturbing Joe’s sleep. It was nearly eleven when ,a bit bleary eyed, he toted two large cups of black coffees passed the desk sergeant. One thing he was certain of he would need at least a gallon of coffee to stay awake and complete the task he’d set for himself.12

He located the files Benson left on his desk along with the document numbers for easy computer access to Cody Vaughn’s research.13

In quick order Joe realized he could pretty much ignore the paper files. Cody had set up the computer files so clearly, Joe decided, even some of the computer illiterate Brass could understand them. 14

Alone in his office he began to study the information on each case; then copy and paste into a new document only the information pertaining to the victims and the murder scenes, minus all mention of names, address and so on that could be traced to a specific individual. 15

His journey through their work convinced him Brad and Cody hadn’t wasted their overtime pay. Joe reached some of the same conclusions they had. Hal Goodwin could be cleared. Neil Harris could be cleared. Pamela Murray fit in too perfectly with the other victims to be ignored. 16

The only inconsistency was the manner of her death. The killer had knifed her. Actually gutted her in the process. Why in this case did he change his MO? Did he know her and have a personal connection? If he was the same killer, that of course took Mark Gheil’s girlfriend out of the equation. No matter how small Pamela Murray was at 112 pounds, no way could the petite Bridgett O’Reilly have gutted her.17

From his pocket he removed two unused flash drives; shoving one into the UBS terminal he downloaded only the new document he constructed. On the other he made a second copy then added the full-length files the information had been taken from. He carefully labeled each and slipped them into his pocket. This would be proof positive that he hadn’t compromised the investigation if someone discovered his intentions.18

Joe Farley left the city owned building that housed precinct 66 at a few minutes past six, his stomach started to remind him nearly an hour ago that it wasn’t satisfied with just coffee. 19

On the short drive to Mallory’s pub, Joe began contemplating the coming month with his daughter. The thought of being totally responsible for an adolescent girl suddenly made him nervous. His apartment was small, he was in the middle of a big case, was it fair to bring her here. Of course his sisters would be there for him, that’s why a fellow had sisters. He found a grin. He’d been blessed with three, all older and each one bossier than the next. Already they’d planned a load of activities for their niece, and were busy cleaning and rearranging his apartment so he hadn’t been able to find anything in days.20

With this murder investigation on his plate, it was going to be tough for him to take time off to spend with Becca. Benson was more than holding up his end—he couldn’t shove more work on his fellow officer—or could he--again he grinned. 21

Joe pulled into a parking space that was waiting for him in front of the pub. That was a rarity maybe his luck was changing. Then he thought of Sandy? 'What would he do about Sandy?' He could no longer brush her away with the nonsense that she could be his daughter. She was seriously penetrating his thoughts, causing emotions that created complications he didn't need. 22

The cool smoky air and dim light greeted him as he entered the pub. He bellied up to the bar and said to Matt, “I'll have a draft.”23

“Joe.” Sandy came out of the kitchen. A wide smile was imprinted on her mouth and lighted her face. “Yesterday was great,” she said.24

“Sure was.” He tried to sound casual. “If dodging lightening bolts is your thing.”25

She actually giggled. He noticed the glances of some of the patrons convincing him they knew what took place and that this young lady informed them. It was only a boat ride, he tried to convince himself, and Neil was with them. 'Damn he was going to kick Neil’s ass.'26

“Hungry?” she asked. “ We have a Boiled New England Dinner for the special.”27

“Sounds good.” Toting his beer, he walked to the rear and parked at the last table.28

When Sandy returned with his order, Joe said simply, “Thanks.”29

Sandy stood for a couple of moments as though expecting Joe to continue their conversation. When he didn't, she turned away and went back to the bar.30

Joe quietly ate his meal and drank his beer, thankful that Sandy was busy waiting on other patrons. He didn't want to hurt her. Shit! He didn't know what he wanted. 31

Sandy came back and asked, “A refill?”32

“Please.”33

They were being too polite, like strangers, not like two people who had been friends for two years. Sandy maintained her distance. Joe didn’t like it. Damn Neil! Joe sat, watched the Yankee game on television, and waited for Neil’s ten after ten arrival.34

When unexpectedly, Sandy also served Neil with barely a word, Neil eyed Joe suspiciously and asked, “Is there a problem?”35

“Yeah, Sandy's pissed and hurt. I knew that boat trip was a bad idea.”36

Neil was quiet for several minutes and then he said, “You find her attractive?”37

“Of course but I don't need the complication.”38

“Are you certain of that?” Neil gazed at Joe with his penetrating eyes. 39

“You playing Cupid, Neil? Don't psychoanalyze me and I don't need you to match make for me.” Joe fingered the flash drive in his pocket. He’d left one in his glove compartment—this was the shorter version. “Now I have a proposition for you. Something that might keep you out of my hair. You want to get at the victims’ files—suppose you have some agenda of your own besides helping me?” 40

He held one hand up to halt Neil’s protest. “I really don’t care. I need a profiler. I need to get in the killer’s head—make certain we are after a certain type. If I bring in the State boys, someone’s going to leak something to the news that will cost me my ass. You just have to give me your word you won’t use any of this information until we catch the perp, and I tell you it’s safe.”41

Neil took a long drink from his Coke. When he set it down he said, “I thought I was a suspect?”42

“You never were with me.” Joe took the backup drive from his pocket. “So let me worry about that.” He didn’t admit Neil had been pretty much cleared. He held out the lighter size gizmo. “We got a deal?”43

“Deal.” Neil agreed and pocketed his contraband. He eyed the TV and said, “4 to 5-- close game.”44

“Just so long as we got the 5,” Joe answered.45

“Got tickets for Wednesday night’s game—you interested?”46

Sandy had paused at their table.47

Joe looked up at her and grinned. “Neil was telling me how he’s got two tickets for Wednesday Night’s Yankee game. He can’t use his—so how about you come along with me?” He ignored the shocked expression on his friend’s face.48

“Great!” Sandy’s face lit up like the world was suddenly a nice place to live in again. 49

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  • condor
    October 6
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    Now this was a great chapter as well, just like the last one. That Neil is a sneaky guy, but joe sure sat him down when he asked sandy out, hey? I laughed at that. I didn't expect such a sudden change. One never knows does one. I like the way you have joes ideas sorted out about his daughter. Having three sisters to help out was a good move. Becca, i take it that is short for rebecca, which i think is the most beautiful name ever. I definately enjoyed this chapter. Just a question. In paragraph 18/1, did you mean USB or is there something else i don't know about? Great writing on the aprt of both of you.

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    • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
      October 6

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      Hi

      Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I missed USB.

      Becca is one of my favorite names, too.

      Geri is the Yankee fan. I don't really keep up with baseball. The team I used to like, but didn't watch, was the Texas Rangers. I'm a football fan, but this story is set during baseball season. Hopefully the killer will be caught before the football season begins.

      I'm glad you're enjoying our story.

      Andy


      • condor
        October 10

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        Hi, Andy. I haven't been on much as my computer is in hospital. Using my love's at the moment while he is bingo. I don't know much about Baseball, or Football, but i have heard of the teams you mentioned. Their are many fans out here i run across all the time. How long till footy season? Going to go read the next chapter.


        • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
          October 10
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          Hi

          In the story I believe we are in July. The football pre-season begins in August. I think we'll have the case solved before then.

          Andy

    • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
      October 6
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      UBS USB--sticky fingers.

      Thanks for catching that. And all the reading and commenting you are doing.

      We really appreciate your continuing on with our story. Your catches and opinions will come in handy and make the next draft so much easier .

      Glad you got a laugh out of Joe turning the tables on Neil .

      See, not only did he buy the tickets but he doesn’t get to go to the game. That will teach him to mess in Joe’s love life .

      Geri


  • WanderingKiKi
    September 30

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    They're behaving like teenagers in love lol so Neil is profiling and Brig seems to be in the killer's eye. Some how I get the feeling that none of this going to help us much in trying to figure out who this mysterious guy is.**Pulls out hair**

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    • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
      October 6
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      Oops sorry we both seemed to have missed saying thank you.

      We do so appriciate your reading and enjoying the story.

      Don't pull your hair out--Please. Neil's work may prove helpful

      Geri


  • Ssmm silver member
    September 3

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    paragraph 8: (“The storm drive you off the water to?” Carmen asked.8) drove you off the water *too*

    paragraph 9: should be "pretend shiver" not "pretended shiver"

    paragraph 12: second sentence, watch your S'. "cups of coffees"
    last sentence, needs a comma or some other punctuation.

    paragraph 15 is just a long run-on sentence. punctuation!

    paragraph 20: third sentence should end with a question mark.

    the second sentence of paragraph 21 is kind of screwy.

    the second sentence of 22 needs a comma.

    in paragraph 22, where he's thinking inside the mini-quote marks, it should be first person. if you're narrating his thoughts, go third. (I.E: what would he do about sandy? 'what will i do about sandy')

    and you spell lightning wrong all the way through.

    but honestly, apart from the minor errors, this is great. your prose is clear and neat, not too flashy, but still interesting to read. you managed to keep the word usage relatively diverse as well. well done, enjoyed reading!

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    • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
      September 5
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      when I see all those foolish goofs, while I know it happens to best of author's, I want to or kick Andy. He kicks back though then I’ll be hobbling for a week.

      Thanks so much for finding them for us. This is a first draft so we expect a number of booboos. You pointing them out will make the next draft soooo much easier.

      We are certainly glad that you are enjoying the story enough to keep reading and commenting.

      Geri


  • Abstract Muse gold member
    August 31

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    I didn't see anything other than what Phil said.

    Nice chapter here guys.
    Aw, Sally's game plan got called due to rain. I liked their impromptu crabfest though. lol

    I like Joe's idea to give Neil the basic relative facts of the murder scenes without names or distracting details and let him profile the killer. Reminds me of Criminal Minds.(I love that show) That should give a good idea of the general character/personality of the killer and make it easier to see those traits in their suspects. Maybe.
    So is 'he' still going after Bridgett? Just wondering.

    Amusing ending there. I bet Joe took Neil by surprise more than he did Sally. Sally may just have her way yet, eh? I hope so for Joe's sake! Poor guy could use a break.

    Another good chapter. Nicely done as usual.
    So let's see what Neil comes up with from the flash drive.
    Greg

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    • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
      August 31
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      You like the Crabby Shack my favorite place to go on a Sat. night--Oh how I would love to go back to my Island days.

      Thanks so much for continuing to read and enjoy our mystery--no got the killer yet?

      Hmmm...looks like Andy's got designs on Bridgett? Got to watch you guys all the time .

      Geri


    • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
      August 31
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      Hi Greg!

      I think I might go after Bridgette. I've always had a thing for cute redheads. Actually I can't honestly tell you if 'he' will go after Bridgette. That's still under discussion.

      We decided to employ Neil's profession in the chase for the killer, so we're putting him to work. Hope you like. It's something I'd not considered when we started this novel. It's funny how stories often write themselves.

      Thanks for reading and all the applause.

      Andy


  • eyeambaldman
    August 29

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    'graph 2: between the (lightning) crackling in the sky

    'graph 25: If dodging (lightning) bolts

    Another fine chapter, guys! Joe had better get the head out of his ass and started pleasing Sandy! Hello? She's young and hot, not to mention hot after him!

    Good stuff, as usual. I just really like Joe, and the I think the reader pulls for him to be happy and also solve this case. Let's hope so!

    The writing is smooth as always and the dialogue flows quite well. Still in the dark about the killer. Of course, nothing is really revealed here in this chapter. Can't wait for more!

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    • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
      August 30
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      Everybody likes Joe . I can understand women maybe wanting to 'mother' him but I figured the fellows would appricate a tougher character for a cop like Brad .

      You are certainly keeping us on track Phil, your comments are worth a lot because you have followed the story so well.

      Geri


    • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
      August 29
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      Thank You

      And they say that lightning never strikes twice in the same place. Well, it struck twice in this story. Thanks for pointing out the misspelling.

      Joe has a trying life, but he's our hero. I'd like to see things work out for him, too.

      So you feel the killer should be caught?

      Andy


      • eyeambaldman
        August 29
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        In a murder mystery, if the killer is not caught, then there either must be a sequel or the killer must be a sympathetic character. He HAS to be caught! lol

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