The Search For Food

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We'd been in space for nearly seven moons. Even traveling at Uberwarp, it had taken us that long to reach the Ugaly solar system. The best bet for finding life suitable for consumption seemed to be the third planet from the star.1

“Do you think we'll find arinalenoids on this planet? Our food supply is nearly depleted,” stated Herzod. Herzod was a sukatruf and required the blood of arinales while I being an ovagorf ate their flesh. The supply of our livestock could have provided blood enough for Herzod indefinitely, but I had to slaughter them in order to eat their flesh.2

We were from the planet Zalion and the remaining arinales there would not last our population much longer. If sources of food were not found soon, there would be little choice but for the sukatrufs and ovagorfs to begin eating each other, whether by peaceful means or war. The population had exploded such that it left little alternative. Blood ovagorfs could donate, but healthy flesh must come from a sacrifice. This would upset the balance between the sukatrufs and ovagorfs. There had been many scout ships sent out. Ours was a success or fail mission. If we found no arinalenoids, we'd soon starve.3

“This planet seems to have life forms, there's a potential,” I said. I hoped that we'd find something suitable to eat.4

We set the ship on autopilot to orbit Ugaly 3. We were down to our last two arinales. If we found no food on this planet, we were doomed. We transported down to the city which had the most inhabitants. “Oh look, it's a werewolf,” said one of the inhabitants and laughed, pointing at me. We had our universal translators in our ears, which had the capacity to translate the language of any intelligent being. We understood immediately that the specimen, that appeared to be male, meant ovagorf. 5

“Yeah, the funny one next to him is probably a vampire,” said the one that seemed to be female. Although, many of the inhabitants stared or pointed, they did not seem to regard us as a threat. They appeared to carry no weapons, though we were armed with neural neutralizers that were set to kill, they made no signs of aggression. Best yet, they appeared to be arinalenoids, almost pure bred arinales. We'd have to run some tests, of course. There were hundreds of them walking down the stone paths. We assumed that they didn't have personal transporters being of lesser intelligence.6

Looking one of the young males in the eyes, I said in our tongue, “Come with me.” Its face went slack and its eyes blank, it began following us. We chose also a young female. We stepped inside one of their structures and transported them up to our space vehicle. It had the capacity to hold a hundred live specimens. 7

The female specimen had red hair and green eyes. It looked tender and lean. However, before I dared partake, it had to be tested. We decided, naturally, to test their blood first. Just because they looked like Asinales, didn't mean we could dine on them. They might be toxic.8

Herzod commanded the male, “Get on the table.” It responded immediately. Herzod took a vial of its blood and began running tests. 9

As Herzod drew the blood, the creature asked, “What are you doing? What do you want? Are you a vampire?”10

Herzod didn't bother answering the inferior being.11

“I think they are ignoring us,” said the female.12

“Up on the table,” I told the female specimen. In the trance, she had to obey.13

Herzod came to the second examining table and took some of female's blood. I knew that Herzod was becoming as hungry as I, but the tests were a necessity. “Quala, I can't wait much longer.”14

Although the female creature was in a daze because of the trance, it asked, “Will it hurt?” as it saw me approach with a sharp flesh cutter. It laid limply on the table unable to resist as I exposed its leg and sliced off a small piece of flesh. 15

Of course it hurt some and tears began to run down its cheeks. The female specimen moaned quietly saying, “Please don't hurt me anymore.”16

It was pointless to explain to them what we were doing. They were potential food, nothing more. I analyzed the slice of fresh meat. The chemical components were almost identical to that of an asinale. I compared a piece of tissue from the male and the results were similar. “I think their meat is edible.”17

“Good,” said Herzod. “Their blood seems nontoxic.”18

“Well, as good as they look, the next step may prove fatal.”19

“Quala, which one should we start with?”20

“There wasn't much different in the chemical makeup of the two, do you have a preference?” I asked.21

“Let's start with the female Ugalian,” said Herzod. 22

I said to the male, “Follow me.”23

“What are you going to do now?” It asked.24

I led it to a stasis chamber that would keep it healthy and alive until needed.25

Herzod said, “Wish me well, my dear friend,” and drank the remaining blood from the vial he had taken from the female. “Tastes wonderful.”26

I watched him carefully, hoping that I could save him if its blood proved poisonous. After allowing enough time for a bad reaction to occur, I said, “How do you feel?”27

“I feel just great.”28

“Please don't hurt me,” the female Ugalian said again. “I'll do anything you want.”29

It was my turn to take the chance. I bit into the female's leg and tore a hunk of meat from it and began to chew. The creature was quite delicious. The Ugalian squealed as I bit into its leg. I savored the taste and then swallowed. 30

Herzod watched me in much the same manner as I had watched him. After a suitable amount of time had passed, I smiled. “No ill effects,” I told him quite happily. “It's a success!” We were so joyful we almost forgot just how famished we were.31

“There must be billions of these asinalenoids, Quala. Our world is saved.”32

“I'll report our findings,” I said excited. “You go ahead and finish with the Ugalian.” There was no need to keep it alive since I needed to eat more of it than it could survive. 33

“Oh God! My leg hurts!” cried the creature.34

Herzod bit into its throat and the young female specimen squealed again. It was a joy to hear that squeal again. Fresh food, it was almost beyond hope that we'd find a new source.35

I reported to the High Command that we'd found a bountiful supply of food in the Ugaly solar system on the third planet. They would immediately send freighters to carry mass quantities of the Ugalians to Zalion. With as many as there were on the planet, if they bred as quickly as asinales did, we might have a constant supply of food. It was a joyous time for us and for all of Zalion.36

I removed the garb of the female Ugalian and returned to eating its leg. I dared to feast myself. Soon its eyes lost the awareness of life. It was so good to allow myself to have a full belly.37

“Qayla, delectable, was it not?”38

“Yes, tender, juicy, lean, and fresh.”39

We remained in orbit. We had no trouble digesting the Ugalians. We continued to report to the High Command. The first wave of freighters arrived and they took back to Zalion half a million of the creatures. We filled our stasis chambers with fresh specimens and returned to Zalion.40

When we arrived at Zalion, we were greeted with pomp and ceremony. We were rewarded with honors for our service and success in finding such a promising food source. Our families shouted with joy when we arrived. The freighters traveled slower than our scout ship, so we gave the leftover fresh specimens to the High Command to devour. They were thrilled to have them. Days later the freighters began to land.41

Although it was possible that Ugaly 3 could provide enough fresh food for Zalion to continue indefinitely, we were sent out to find additional sources of blood and meat. It was speculated that there might be other planets that had asinalenoid life. This time, however; our mission didn't require that we risk our lives by pushing our food reserves to the end. We headed out in a different direction with great hopes for success. The sukatrufs and ovagorfs would be able to live peacefully on Zalion, perhaps, forever.42

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  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    November 13
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    Andy, did I ever tell you you can come up with some horrific plots. Human Cattle. Kind of reminds me of a TV show called 'V'.

    Very well written, but of course I can always see more to put into a short story.

    Fun read.

    Geri


    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      November 13
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      Hi Geri!

      Thanks for commenting!

      There's a lot of room in this story for more. There's not much background on the aliens and as macfluffers pointed out, some resistance on the part of the cattle could be entertaining. Did you like the little touch of humor when the New Yorkers regarded the werewolf and vampire as more or less typical New Yorkers decked out in costume? Nothing to be considered greatly out of the norm.

      Andy

  • macfluffers
    November 7
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    Interesting! However, I would have preferred to see some stronger conflict. The whole thing seemed a bit too easy to me. I mean, the entire planet finished like that? Not even a fight? I find it hard to believe that suggestive abilities can be that strong.

    Also, the sukatrufs and ovagorfs must not be too bright if they never noticed the existence of vehicles. Furthermore, for them to not understand that "neural neutralizers" don't look like anything to those unfamiliar with their technology is odd

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
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      Thanks Macfluffers!

      It's true, of course, that this story could be further developed. I had fun with it. It was just a quicky.

      I don't often do major revisions. I usually move on to the next story instead. I figure I'll improve as I continue writing new stories. I'll correct grammar as I find mistakes or others point them out.

      What do you think I should do to improve this story?

      Andy

      • macfluffers
        November 7
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        Well, I would start by having a more defined climax. I can't really tell where it is, or if there even is one; I was expected something big to happen and then...oh, it's over? It almost feels like the falling action starts at the same time the rising action does.

        How you would implement this, I'm honestly not sure. Personally, I would make it so that the aliens discovered that their food source is not incapable of trying to defend itself, but it feels that one of the ideas of the story is that people are indeed incapable of defending themselves.

        Otherwise, there are still other things you can do. Maybe the two aliens get into a fight over who gets to eat first, or maybe the "werewolf" went ahead and killed the human, forcing the other to wait for another one. Or maybe they crash and have to survive off of their technology, and end up being hunted like classic monsters. In any case, I think that a monkey wrench of some sort should be thrown into their day.

        Also, a random thing I realized is that if the translators are not in English, then how would they hear words that seem non-translatable, such as "werewolf" and "vampire"?

        • Andy Stephenson gold member
          November 7
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          Hmm.

          The aliens regard humans as livestock.

          Most of my stories do not involve much action. The victims tend to be submissive. It's something I should probably experiment with.

          You feel I should have humanity fight back?

          Well, that would indeed require some revision.

          If the urge should strike you, you're welcome to rewrite this story and split suthorship, if it interests you.

          Andy

          • macfluffers
            November 7
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            Ooh, that's a very nice invitation of you. I may do that some time.


  • Aqua-Chan
    July 27

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    Very fantasy-like. A nice read and I enjoyed reading it.

    Thank you for entering and the details are amazing. I forgot to mention the description is outstanding. ^^;

    ~Aqua

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      July 27
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      Hi!

      I'm glad you enjoyed this story. Since it has werewolves and vampires, I guess it's a cross between fantasy and sci-fi. I had a lot of fun writing it and I tried to give the story some humor.

      Thanks for hosting and reading. I appreciate it.

      Andy


  • Ashlyn Rose
    July 12

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    Ohhhhhh you broke my contest rule! yes I am kind of strict on that! Your story was a great mix of vampires and science fiction. Not many can do that but My Rules! They are ruined! Bleh! you hurt my feelings.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      July 12
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      Hi Snow Angel!

      That's strange! I don't even remember the ten contest rule. Sorry. I must be getting forgetful in my young age.

      I didn't mean to break the rules or hurt you're feelings. If you need to DQ, that's all right.

      I'm glad you like this story.

      Andy


  • Noctella
    July 1

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    Right. This contest does not allow horror, vampires, or psychopathic main characters. Though I would give you some leeway on the psychopath rule since these aren't human. But also, no entries that have been entered into more than three other contests or have won any previous awards. Sorry, I am going to have to DQ you. Good luck with your other contests.

    Anyway, I like the names you pick. It is an ok, interesting story.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      July 1
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      That's Okay.

      I actually read all the rules, but they didn't all sink in. Sorry. I don't know if I'll try to find another story or not. You have so many disqualifiers, I may not have one.

      Andy


  • vamplover22907
    June 12

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    *files brownie points on your name*
    it was actually very cool. Ugaly 3 sounds like ugly. it was nicely written and it showed that they needed to find food. a bit of urgency in there tone of voice would have been nice and a rumbling of their stomachs would have been a nice and funny edition. ^_^ other than that I did not find anything wrong with it.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      June 12
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      Hi!

      Yep, Ugaly is a play on ugly.

      I'm sure this can be improved. All my stuff can. If I get to it, I may come back and try to give this story a rewrite. I'll review the comments, if I do. You make a good point.

      Thanks again for all the applause.

      Andy


  • Dassy
    May 23
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    Erm, kind of sickening, but good DETAILS. Well done.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      May 23
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      Hi Dassy!

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Sickening? All they were doing is drinking blood and eating. Everybody needs to eat.

      Andy


  • Dual.Of.Fireflies
    May 22
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    GROSS! That was amazing! EW! I loved it! Again, Andy, do you think they left any blood for me?

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      May 22
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      Well,

      they'd discovered a pretty good source for food, blood and meat. They found about seven billion arinalenoids on planet Ugaly(Earth). If they don't get you first, you might be able to enjoy some of the Ugalians before they use them all up.

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      Andy


  • MoonRoseWolf gold member
    April 28

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    Very gory, but I'm used to that from some of your stories now, so I'll try not to be too shocked

    I actually really liked it. It's an original twist on the idea of werewolves and vampires. I do agree that the victims were somewhat pushovers, but I understand it can be difficult to fit everything into a short story.

    I enjoyed reading this-and considering I rolled my eyes when I saw the tag 'Sci-fi', that's an achievement with me!

    Well done, and good luck in the contest!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      April 28
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      Hi Ms. Wolf!

      I'm very happy that you like this story in spite of the sci-fi tag. Perhaps I could interest you in trying another of my sci-fi tales?

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I'm glad your contest turned out well, though I wish I'd placed better.

      Andy

  • DeathByChocolate
    April 13

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    Okay, good story. I like the imaginative species and planets and stuff. It is kinda gross....But still pretty good.

    GOOD LUCK!!!!!!1

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      April 13
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      Hi Ms. Peace!

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I hope you had many good entries and much fun.

      I'm glad that you felt this story is pretty good.

      Andy


  • spikeyness
    April 4

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    Well...

    The storyline was basic,nothing demanding there; I thought that the human victims were a bit too much of a pushover, and even though the bad guys win, they should have had to work for it.
    Thin plot, thin dialogue, zero humour.
    Characterisation was pretty much none existent; the two aliens were all appetite, and not a spark of wit to keep them warm on their journey through space. Frankly, they may have enough to eat, but sukatrufs and ovagorfs will not survive in the long run. What would be the point?

    plot: 1.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      April 4
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      Hi!

      Something about your comment gives me the feeling that you didn't like this story. I put a little humor in it, damn shame you couldn't find it.

      I don't know what you expect in 1,300 words, but I feel this is pretty good.

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    February 14
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    hm...

    thank-you for entering my contest i will be reviewing all of the finalists momentarily


  • luvme728
    January 19

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    This story was disgusting. It made me want to puke. Ew. But since it is a fantasy, it was pretty good. Good job

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      January 19
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      Hi!

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I couldn't really tell if you like this story or not.

      I hope you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • XxXDreamWeaverXxX
    December 15, 2008
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    Ahh, this isnt the first time you have entered one of my contests... THIS story was entered in my other contest "A is for Anything" So I remember this one well, it was a gold winner as I remeber, well done (again)... But because you one gold in my last conttest I will let someone else have a chance... Sorry, but dont let it get you down, this was a truly great story. Writen by a truly great author, keep it up!!!

    ~Cat!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      December 15, 2008
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      Sorry about that!

      I didn't realize you'd read this before. I should really pay closer attention. Thanks for the gold in the earlier contest.

      Andy


  • Lithron
    December 14, 2008

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    Desturbing, but good. I like the idea of how vampires and werewolves are aliens. Maybe you should do one with Dracula. Have him be a convict or something like that. Anyway, good story and good luck.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      December 15, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. Hmm. I'd hope to make it a little humorous as well.

      Dracula as a convict, now that's interesting. Maybe it might be more fun if he was a prison guard at a woman's prison.

      I have my own vampires. One that owns a movie theater and dines on his patrons, another that makes snuff movies, and I also have one who is out to save the world in his own style.

      I really hope you like my story.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • WritersEffigy gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    Yeah, redheads do.
    A bit rushed at times, and it's kind of odd how they land and immediately know what the creatures are, but that might just be their technolomolical advanceness.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      December 14, 2008
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      Thanks

      Yes, I guess this is a bit rushed, but I wasn't really trying to go in depth. I had another story I was going to enter, but it was over the word limit. I hope you liked this one.

      Well they looked like arinalenoids, so I guess that why they thought they were, but they tested them first to make certain.

      I've actually never had a redhead, but I've always wanted one.

      Andy


  • wolf-storm
    December 14, 2008
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    Good story keep writing. It had good detail. Thanks for entering in the contest.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      December 14, 2008
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      Thanks

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I hope you like this story.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • Mads
    December 6, 2008

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    Very Good

    That was really good! That was what I was looking for in my contest; creativity. I enjoyed reading this a lot!
    Even if it did make me feel sick when i read the part about ripping flesh.
    I liked it, though.
    Good good!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      December 6, 2008
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      Thanks

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

      The poor critters had to eat. They found a whole planet full of suitable livestock.

      I'm very glad that you like this story.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      I like your colorful moon picture.

      Andy


  • StarOfDreams23
    November 27, 2008
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    Wow...it was great and gory and it made me scream with the female. *shudders* it was awesome!!!!!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      November 27, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy

  • XxXDreamWeaverXxX
    November 20, 2008

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    oh my god! i have read several of your stories and you never stop supprising me!i love the way you wrote the story, it was so clever! thankyou so much for entering my contest too.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank You

      I'm glad you like my stuff and also glad that you like this story.

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it.

      I hope you have many good entries and much fun

      Andy


  • poetry is soul
    November 4, 2008
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    haha i have read this before, and i absolutely loved it... i remember, because i kept thinking to myself... wow, what a twist to vampires and werewolves. i would have never thought of that! this is really good. lol


    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      November 4, 2008
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      Sorry about that!

      Would you like me to enter something else? I didn't remember that you'd read this story.

      Andy


  • Ghost of a Siren
    October 25, 2008

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    Another good story. I'd seen this one around in contests and never had the time to read it, but I did and really liked it. Very creepy how detached their emotions were to the humans.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      Hi Stephanie!

      Thanks for reading this story and all the applause. I hope you like it.

      Yep, most people, including my alien werewolf and vampire, don't get personally involved with their food. They just eat and go on to the next tasty meal.

      Andy


  • Celestial Rose
    October 23, 2008

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    Wow

    I like how you started with them talking about coming from space. Its funny, but I don't ever think that way. To me, strange creatures come from the very heart of earth, and will remain to guard earth from any danger that comes. I think of it as: Fate is something I don't know. I just know things happen for a reason. Hehe, but enough of that! Great work, this was truly a talented write.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 23, 2008
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      Thank You!

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I'm glad that you like this story. I decided to add a bit of Sci-fi to the usual vampire/werewolf tale. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

      I hope you found some humor in the story. I tried to make it funny.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • Neolittlefish
    October 14, 2008

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    I don't normally like these kind of stories, but this one was really good. It provoked a lot of emotions and was very well written, great job!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 14, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

      I'm glad that you like this story. I tried to combine a little humor with the story. I don't often write sci-fi mixed with fantasy and horror. This was a fun change of pace.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      You can award silver and bronze trophies without assigning points to them if you wish.

      Andy

      • Neolittlefish
        October 14, 2008
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        Wow, I never new that! Thanks I'll do that, I never expected such a huge response and people need recogntion for their wonderful stories


  • Bradshaw 101
    October 14, 2008

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    Interesting... The alien language made everything a littkle complicated, but a nice take on an old story.
    Althoigh personaly I prefer it when vampires and werewolves hate eachother

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 14, 2008
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      Hi

      Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

      I have a werewolf and vampire story where they do hate each other.

      The reason for the alien terms was to give the story more authenticity. I hope it didn't make it too tough to read.

      Andy


  • mharrington05
    October 3, 2008

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    Excellent! This really made me smile, intergalactic vampires and werewolves and with universal translators to boot! Very original piece and i liked the detached emotions shown toward their food source, reminds me of another species of being....
    Very well written and kept me engaged all the way through, can't ask for more than that. Well done, good luck in the competition.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 3, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story. I tried to add a bit of humor to it.

      I hope you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • cole3313
    October 1, 2008

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    Another great story. What am i gonna do?!
    This was really really interesting.
    Finalist list!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I'm glad I made the finalist list. I'm also glad that you like this story. I enjoyed writing it.

      I hope you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • DemApples
    September 30, 2008
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    love the names *poker face*

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      September 30, 2008
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      Thank You

      I'm glad you love the names. I hope that you like more than the names.

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

      I hope you get all the entries you want.

      Andy


  • Fearless.
    September 29, 2008

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    This was very strange and good at the same time. But the weird thing is is that everyone in my competition seems to be entering stories about blood! It's really freaky. But I really liked it. Well done!

    ~Devil Angel~

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      September 29, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. Everybody is writing about blood? I'm glad you like that and I'm glad you like this story.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • Melancholic Smile
    September 22, 2008

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    I have to be honest when I say that sci-fi/fantasy is not a genre I usually enjoy but this piece was so well written and descriptive that I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! I liked the subtle humour that was in there as well as the blood thirsty characters - which you had chosen great names for! A really good short story. Well done

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. This was a fun story to write. I'm very pleased you enjoyed reading it.

      The poor aliens had to eat, you know.

      I hope you had many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • LittleMissChrissie
    September 20, 2008

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    Very, very well written. I could practically see it all happening in front of me, as it was very descriptive and graphic, but in a good way. I haven't read anything like this so far in the contest, and it was very original. Good job.

    There was no spelling or grammatical errors so far as I could see, so well done!

    The very best of luck in the contest!

    Chrissie

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      September 21, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I hope that you like this story.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • Oddems.
    September 16, 2008

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    I liked this story a lot - good writing and not any grammar errors that I could see. You did a great job and I enjoyed the story very much. You have a wonderful talent and imagination. Thanks for entering and good luck!

    PR

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      September 16, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it.

      I'm very pleased that you like this story so much. May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy

  • condor
    September 6, 2008

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    Wow! This was a great story, if not a little blood thirsty. You certainly have a way with this type of writing, like the dragon one. I enjoyed this story immensely and was quite taken by the different approach to fiction. Loved it.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      September 6, 2008
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      Thank You

      I'm very pleased that you like this story so much. I have fun writing these. I get to play out my dark fantasies in my writing.

      Believe it or not, I'm really a kind and generous soul. A person has to decide the type of person they are. I'm pleased with that person I am at the core.

      You may get into some of my really dark horror/erotica - crime/erotica. Be prepared.

      Andy

  • poetry is soul
    August 29, 2008

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    you have a very good imagination. i really liked this story, how you added a twist almost to the image of vampires and werewolves. that is very cool. and the names you came up with were pretty extrodinary as well. you did very well the imagery. very good job!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      August 29, 2008
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      Thank You

      Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I'm very pleased that you like this story. I decided to mix sci-fi with fantasy. I hope the contest host likes it.

      Yes, I just dreamed up the names.

      Andy

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