Those Clouds In Your Eyes--Part I

She looked at me, her eyes glassy. “I don’t think I can…”1

I grabbed her hand and looked into her eyes. “Can what?”2

She bit her lip. I squeezed her hand, but then she pulled it out of my nervous grasp.3

“I can’t see you anymore, Sky,” she said, blinking back tears. She wiped her eye with her left hand, looking down. My heart instantly fell. She’s doing this again.4

“Why?”5

She looked up, but she couldn’t stare directly at my face for longer than a few seconds.6

“I… I think I love you.” Then what is the problem?7

I looked at her in disbelief. “And that’s bad? Kat, you know I’d do anything for you. You know I love you too. What has changed?”8

“I know, but I just...”9

“What?”10

There was a moment of silence. She moved her hand to wipe away another tear. I grabbed it, turning it over and kissing her palm. 11

“Do you think you can trust me?” I said, staring into her eyes. 12

I could hear the cold wind whipping against the frosted window in my small, dimly lit room. She choked slightly, her face growing a bit red, but then she stopped, grabbing hold of herself…13

She leapt forward, her lips crashing against mine, and her arms finding their way around me, holding me as if she’d never want to let go. Her breaths quickened as her kisses pushed deeper and her fingers intertwined with my long hair. Our tongues graced each other’s before each break. I let out a small sigh and moved my hands to her chest, and rubbed down her waist and hips, grasping the bottom hem of her blouse… and then she suddenly stopped, holding my head with both hands, a set of long fingers still caught in a frantic knot of dark, russet hair. She stared into my eyes, and for the first time in a while, she smiled. I went to speak, but she put her finger to my lips.14

“Yes, I can trust you.” 15

And with that, my hands left her shirt and found their way back to her hair, to caress her face, that beautiful face. "I love you," I reaffirmed, kissing her as my arms snaked back around her waist to pull her in. Keeping one hand holding Kat close to me, my other snaked up her blouse, searching for that hook that has been the bane of so many men. I inwardly smirk, knowing that I was luckier than those men. I, for one, had daily practice unhooking bras with one hand.16

"Kat? You're going to have to move your hands out of my hair if this is ever coming off, you know."17

“Oh, yeah…” she giggled, carefully separating her fingers from hair that wasn’t exactly cooperating. Once finally free she smiled and kissed my nose. “Done.”18

"You know, Kat, your giggles make this seem more like a game..." I whispered into her ear. "There's nothing funny about us..." I grinned, and nuzzled her neck. She let out a faint moan as I started to suck and nibble, dropping her bra off the edge of the bed and working on the buttons of her blouse.19

"Oh, Sky... That's feels really good... B-but I..." she paused and looked down at me. "I don't know how to say this, but... th-this is my first time. Doing... this."20

I looked at her. "...With a woman?"21

"W-with anyone." She looked to the side. "I should have told you before."22

I shrugged it off. Grinning, I replied, "Well, at least this means you can't say I'm worse than any previous lovers. Now, I believe I was busy here." And with that I continued my work, making circles with my tongue, with little reason other than distracting Kat from how much I was fumbling with her buttons.23

"...Eh... Say, could I get some help here?" I said, in the sexiest voice I could muster.24

Sky giggled again. "For someone acting so experienced, you certainly seem nervous." She reached over and unbuttoned the last few obstacles in my path. "Now, considering how much you're fumbling, would you like some help with my belt?"25

I blushed and looked away. "Yes, please..." Her hands found their way back into my hair, and she combed through with her fingers. My hands took control of caressing her breasts while my kisses began travelling farther down.26

"You know, as fumbly as you may be, I still love you," she said, dangling her belt off the side of the bed. "Don't know why, but.. oh, that feels good. But yeah. I don't know why, but I do."27

“Then just relax,” I whispered, trailing my kisses around her left breast. I moved a hand to down to her jeans, unzipping them and I slid my tongue around and across her nipple. 28

“S-Sky…”29

“Shh...”30

I undid the button with surprising ease. Smiling to myself, I pulled her jeans all the way off and threw them atop the growing pile of clothes on the floor. Then I brought my mouth to her right breast, running my fingers between her legs.31

Running my finger across her panties, Kat immediately arched her back. "Oh... Oh! That's good." A minute passed. "Keep doing that, Sky," she moaned. "Ooh..."32

"I'm afraid, love, that I simply cannot comply." I smirked and brought my other hand down, and while continuing my actions with my first hand, I moved a finger underneath her panties, probing, teasing... finally entering her slowly, moving in and out a few times, and removing itself to trace her inner thigh. I was having far too much fun with this. 33

Still moving my other finger, I slowly brought my head down after sneaking a glance at her face. Her eyes here closed, her mouth slighty open and she breathed a bit quicker than normal. I then moved the panties a little more to the side as I pushed her legs father apart. I bent down and ran my tongue up the area I was running my finger over. I instantly heard a gasp from above. I continued flicking my tongue from side to side, holding her panties aside with one hand while caressing her inner thigh with the other. I started exploring Kat with my tongue, making myself at home between her legs. I was searching for something, that one spot that would drive Kat wild. Panting as though she was, I needed to do more.34

And then I found it, and I knew as soon as I heard her sharp intake of breath. "Oh... Oh... SK-SKY!!" She cried, holding onto the side of the bed and squirming back and forth. "ContinuecontinuecontinueOhmygod."35

And I obliged, with a flick of my tongue here, and few circling motions there, and she was enjoying every nanosecond of it. But I wasn’t going to let things end so quickly. 36

I continued to hear her moan once more before kissing the inside of her right thigh, and sitting up. I pulled down her panties, dropping those to the floor, and came up to kiss her. I felt rather relieved as she started pulling my shirt up, pausing a kiss to let it over my head and fling it into the darkness. I could feel her hands a second later, reaching behind me to undo my bra. Unlike I, Kat used both of her hands for this task, but she also wasn't fumbling nearly as much as I had been earlier. Easily coming off, it too was discarded.37

"You know, Sky," taunted Kat, giving me a seductive grin, "Stopping there was so...." She paused to lean down and nibble my neck for a second, before continuing. "...cruel."38

"I suppose I'll just have to get my revenge." 39

And with that, she started exploring my newly exposed flesh. I was eager to see what would happen, yet her bravery was turning me on already. I closed my eyes as she unbuttoned and unzipped my pants, pulling those away, responding to my movents meant for help by brushing them aside. She immediately got rid of my panties as well, quickly trailing nibbles and kisses downward. Once she reached her destination, however, there was a small pause, as if she was unsure, or doubting herself. I opened my mouth to speak, but she cut me off when she slowly dragged her tongue up, between my legs. I sighed deeply.40

She moved her tongue up and down a few times before pushing it inside. My hand found it’s way onto her head, into her short blonde hair as she moved her tongue, sending shivers up my spine.41

Kat continued working magic with her tongue, entering me with a steady rhythm. I moaned. 42

But she'd apparently learned from me that more can be better than less. Her hand moved up to caress my flesh while her mouth was moving, rubbing me in all the right places. 43

"Oh, Kat!"44

My hands were practically grabbing at her hair, but before it caused her any pain I loosed my grip with some difficulty. “Ahh….AH! KAT!” I lifted my knees off the bed pulling my feet back, moving my toes. This wasn’t fair. She was the virgin. But this thought dissapated as quickly as it appeared with another fury of pleasure running through my body.45

She lifted her head. "Yessss...?" She grinned. "I said I'd get revenge and I believe I succeeded." She climbed over me and closed the space between our lips. 46

Separating myself, but still breathing heavily, I panted, "Did... you seriously... have to end... there? I was about to..." but I was cut off.47

"And so was I. Now, I believe you'd better apologize for being so... cruel... earlier." She grinned. "I'll leave it up to your imagination as to how."48

I breathed in deep, holding it for a second, then letting it out. My heart was still pattering a small degree over it’s usual range of beats. I took my hand to her right cheek, “Alright.”49

I rolled over ontop of her, attacking her neck with bites and kisses. My hands moved to her breasts, running their fingers over her nipples. She closed her eyes shut and moved her head back, allowing me as much access to her neck as I wanted. A set of fingers found their way into my hair again. 50

The bites and kisses found their way to every conceivable area of her neck. I brought my mouth down to her left breast, sucking and licking fervently. The hand which had previously been occupied with her nipple worked its way down began slowly stroking her waist, making perfectly innocent circles on her skin. I paused, to interject: "Say, Kat, I wonder if you're ticklish. Are you ticklish? I bet you are." And with that, I began tickling her abdomen and legs, taking pleasure in the sight of her squirms.51

“Mmm! Stop that!” she giggled, swatting at me with her hand. I immediately caught one of her fingers in my teeth, just hard enough to stop it from further movement. Taking her hand in mine, I softly kissed the inside of her wrist and lay her hand back down onto the bed. I kissed down her stomach, and turned around so my back was facing her. I then kissed up her leg while tracing up and down her inner thigh with one finger. I moved slowly. I wanted her to suffer. I began kissing down her leg now, stopping at her knees to pay special attention to their backs. I aready knew they were sensitive from countless tickle fights we'd had in the past, and it was time to put my knowledge to good use. I kissed them and licked them, and made sure Kat couldn't bend her legs to block them. She gripped the edges of the bed. "Sky!! You know I'm really ticklish there!!" was all she could muster before bursting out into another fit of giggles. "Stooooop!"52

Of course, I had to comply. My tongue began slowly tracing her inner thigh when my finger had been just moments before. "Ah, but Kat. I've found somewhere more ticklish. And you didn't seem to complain about that, did you." 53

I turned my head and winked at her, before turning fully around, pulling my body up to rest my head on my arms, staring at her from my view atop her stomach. “Hey… Kat?” 54

“Yeah?” She said, looking slighty confused with my sudden change of mood.55

“Do you like it here?”56

“What do you mean?” Her eyebrows raised as she clearly didn’t understand my question.57

“I mean… do you like being here? With me.”58

“Of course I do.”59

“So… what would you say if I asked if you wanted to be here more often? With me.”60

“Well, I’d love to. But you know I can’t be here any more often than I am already due to scheduling, my shitty job and gas prices.” She smiled.61

“No. What would you say if I asked if you wanted to live together?”

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This is something I'm writing with a friend. We share everything in and/or having to do with this story. We're looking for constructive criticism, comments, etc. Basic reactions.

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  • Quixotic Greeters member
    October 21

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    really hot you are a finalist

  • Mazzon
    October 15

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    As sex scenes go, this one has a very light mood to it. Perhaps even a bit too light, as the joking comments kind of disrupted the tension, at least for me.
    While I understand this is supposedly a part of a greater whole, as is the ending seems rather glued-on and unnecessary. It could work as a cliffhanger to a subsequent chapter if we had some attachment to the relationship beyond just this one scene, but as a stand-alone maybe another kind of closing would be stronger.

    • Zoldor
      October 15
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      Thanks for the comment!

      Chances are, we'll end up adding far more scenes to before this one, and we're definitely going to add more afterwards. I do agree with you on the lightness.


  • Lonesome Dove
    October 7

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    Great story! I liked the teasing back and forth. Made it real. I hope you do continue... I'm looking forward to Part 2


  • WanderingKiKi
    October 4

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    "I'm afraid, love, that I simply cannot comply." and "ContinuecontinuecontinueOhmygod." my two fav lines...very nice work. Keep It Up


  • BetterThanDrugs
    September 18

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    well for this on I have no criticism, I was too wrapped up in the story to notice any grammatical errors, it's good though....I hope that you don't plan on leaving it here I hope that you are still working on it becasue well, it's to good to end it there.....keep it up.....
    ~&~Lauren~&~

    • Zoldor
      September 19

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      Thank you so much! Yeah, we're planning on continuing, though it may take a while since school's started and we've other things to do; but we're most certainly continuing. Thanks!

      And yeah, we both posted it, sorry!


  • Sgs silver member
    September 14

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    Mmmmm yes. Very nice work, both with the idea of uncertainty on the part of Kat as well as describing the sexual action. Thanks for the contest entry and good luck!


  • IpodLove
    September 5
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    Hott....


  • Imaru-Mi-Amore
    September 1

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    I thought it was a good story...........
    I liked how it was playful......
    Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!!

  • BuBBLeGuM PWNZ
    August 31

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    *is disturbed* XDD

    and btw, they didn't sound like REAL people. no offense, guys. peoplez don't talk like that...

    • Zoldor
      August 31
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      But Saraaaaah! You're prolly the only person who cares about the dialogue! XDDD

  • I don't know what to say to that, sorry I'll just give you the applause if you don't mind, cause that was awesome Keep up the amazing work.

    ~*Princess*~

    • Zoldor
      August 31
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      Thank you SO much. <3 We shall certainly try to keep it up. ^_^


  • St.Pandemonium
    August 29

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    Just astounding...

    Wow. That. was. amazingly. written.
    I was, literally, on the edge-of-my-seat thrown into a barrel of honest, raw, organic feelings...the feelings most humans share with people they love. You two chose the write set of descriptive phrases..nothing was over the top, as in most erotica, especially LGBT erotica where everything seems to be covered in a fuzz of bodily fluids and no real emotional depth. This was far from that. I'm gay and I can say that I was truly, truly engaged and excited to know more of these characters. Wow.

    And then I found it, and I knew as soon as I heard her sharp intake of breath. "Oh... Oh... SK-SKY!!" She cried, holding onto the side of the bed and squirming back and forth. "ContinuecontinuecontinueOhmygod."3 <--I especially love that line.

    In sum, excellence abound!

    Jay

    . Rewarded 8

    • Zoldor
      August 31
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      I already sent you a message, but yeah. Don't worry, you'll definitely see more of these characters!

      ...Of course, you probably figured that out from the 'Part I' in the title...

      Thanks sosososososo much!!! <3

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