“Emily we should so go!” I showed her the website for our favorite singer Avenged Sevenfold. Stating he was having a bad problem with some sudden sickness. 1
“But Jess there’s no way we could actually meet him!” 2
“We could try to find his apartment duh!”3
“Fine what airport do you want to go to?”4
“Atlanta?” 5
“Okay let’s go in a few weeks.”6
I got my bags packed with my comb, and my clothes. I turn and look into the mirror at my black hair with blue streaks going across my fringe. I take a look at my phone and see that its states one missed call. I dial in emi’s number, and we talked for about 5 minutes then we agree I come pick her up.7
I grab my bag and comb my long brown hair. I make sure that my tags are on my luggage. and have my name Emily printed on them. Honk honk! I look and see Jess is in her convertible waiting for me eagerly. So suddenly do I run down the stairs and lock the door that I notice that we’re actually going to see freaking Avenged Sevenfold! I get in the car and we drive and see the gates saying WELCOME TO AIRLINE EXPRESS. 8
“Are you okay Emily?”9
“You look scared.”10
“I’m fine just nervous about the flight that’s all.”11
“Well we’ll just do the party boy dance in our seat then!”12
“Welcome to the UK” the system says.13
I stir in my sleep attempting to get up. And fall down forgetting that I had seat belt on me. I woke up right then and there when I saw the land scrapes of the UK. God Jess still hasn’t woken up yet. I mean come on even a parade wouldn’t wake her up! I push her lightly attempting to wake her up from her deep slumber.14
“What?”15
“Wake up we’re here.”16
I look up attempting to open my eyes from sleeping. Holy cow! We’re actually in UK! I get up and my black hair once evenly straight looks like hell now. I grab our luggage and get out of the airport hurrying to attempt to get a cab out in the busy jcpenny discount price sale sort of street.17
"Jess let’s get into our hotel now, and look up the ticket prices."18
I grabbed her hand and we got our key cards, and zoned into our room. We did our happy dance when we found out we were able to get tickets front seat! We get ready to go to sleep, and I wake up with her only to find a white envelope labeling tickets. To be continued 19
Haha just some novel we are trying to publish do you like it?
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Its promoising, thats for sure. Its a good setup and it could go in loads of different directions. Maybe a bit of character background would help it along, plus check for mistakes (Spelling etc - sorry I'm crap at these myself, just thought I'd put it out there) You can sense the nerves, its realistic!
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WOO!! xD go babeh!! lmao hehe i love it ^^ xD


