The Cards of Royals Chapter One: Jack of Hearts

"Oooooo, this is going to be fun!" Trick laughed in that childish, yet ominous way of his; tossing a pair of black and white dice into the air. Chuckles still escaping his mouth as he caught them again in a leather gloved hand. He continued to snicker and play with the dice, the others still continuing their debate. 1

Jack took one long look at Trick, the young Card may have been ignorant and rambunctious in his ways but he was a needed asset to their team. Dressed in only black and white as the others, Trick had taken a more street punk look then the rest of them. He looked more fit to be at a rave with his revealing, tight fitting clothing then at this type of meeting. His shirt was more of a simple black vest a size too small for his thin body if anything, with no shirt underneath, it was fastened on to him by only one button. He wore his dirty blonde hair short, a spade shape shaved out on the left side of his head above his ear, which was adorned with many steel hoops and bars. He had cruel mismatched eyes, one shocking blue the other a misty grey; they were always searching for some new twisted game he could use as a form of entertainment.Just looking for some means of distraction for his clearly nonexistent attention span. He grinned happily, continuing to toss the dice before him watching the cubes rise and fall with his eyes, the hand gloved only to the wrist in black leather cradling them for a brief moment each time, never missing. On his young face a dark tattoo of another spade stood out against his pale skin, a tiny thing smaller then a dime in size placed under his eye like a misshapen black tear.2

"Are you still with us Jack?" The lead royal, King spoke up seeing his disciple staring intently at the unruly Trick, annoyance clear in his expression. Jack was the mature link of the group. Wearing a more sophisticated outfit consisting of frayed black slacks, and a jacket, although the sleeves of both the jacket and the ruffled white dress shirt beneath it had been ripped off in favor of a rougher style. Jack also had hair long enough to fall stray into his face, reaching his nose in the front ant the bottom of his ears in the back. A worn top-hat was perched askew on his head, and white gloves covered the pale flesh of his hands. He too had a tattoo, a small black heart, on the side of his neck.3

"Always King." Was Jack's automatic answer as he turned to face his Lord and Mistress. 4

"Ah, that's our Jackie." Hera, the queen Card, spoke in the slightly amused tone she always used. "Trick's fine, now pay attention." 5

"Of course, sorry." Jack nodded his head out of respect. The lady royal, the only female member of this elite group, was dressed seductively showing off her small, but muscled form in black and red. He top was strapless and clung tightly to her body to hold her chest up and in, on her head long coppery red hair pulled back into a pony tail to keep it out of the way. Her black silken gloves covered her entire forearm to the elbow and she wore a small skirt with torn leggings only reaching her knees. Her eyes were the same merciless grey of her partner's, King, and a black diamond was inked into the skin on the upper left side of her chest.6

The King of Clubs was dressed for comfort in his loose fitting clothing. Black cargo pants and a black T-shirt, a black and white checkered belt peeking out from under it. He had a strong built but a delicate face that was decorated with a single piercing in his eyebrow. Although still shorter than Jack's his rich brown hair was longer than Trick's and gelled into ruffled spikes. The tattoo of the club was permanently on the inside of his right wrist, a black mark the size of a quarter.7

"So are there anymore questions?" King asked, looking knowingly at Jack. 8

The dark haired boy sighed and stood up, he leaned against the dirty wall of the abandoned factory they were holding court in. With a sigh he pulled out a deck of playing cards and started to shuffle them absentmindedly. Like Trick with his dice it was an anxious habit. The place was far from glamorous and not the place beings of such power should be expected to meet, but it suited them well. It was old, abandoned, dark, and creepy from years of being like that, they were meeting in the dead of night. Only the scarce moonbeams that pooled in from the dirt stained windows and failing roof gave them light. Then again they didn't need much light to see by. "Tell me again why were doing this?" Jack requested, the playing cards passing through one another in a steady rhythm. 9

"We're doing this, Jack, to gain control of the Light Court." King was cross with him, Jack knew it. 10

"So wiping out the Light Court will put us in power?" He was itching for a sensible answer, something he wasn't likely to find from any of the other Cards. 11

"No, we're not wiping out the Light Court." Hera corrected, faster then King could get to it. "We're taking them over, we're even playing by the rules." Trick chuckled lightly having been listening to the conversation for once. Jack scoffed but kept his mouth shut. The rules, now that was a joke. The rule they were referring to was the one that said whoever killed the Queen of the Light court was its new ruler. 12

"There needs to be a balance," Jack said for the millionth time it seemed. Balance, it was a concept they didn't seem to get. They were a renegade court, the Royal Cards, most of them hailed from the Dark Court itself. Jack tried to make them realize that even the Dark Court understood the need for balance. Although you wouldn't believe it with their constant tension with the Light Court. Jack himself was the only Royal to come from the light court. Trick and King were both from the dark court, and Hera was one of the solitary fae. 13

"There you go, preaching all that crap about 'balance'!" Trick scowled securing his dice in one hand and glaring at the dark haired boy wearing a top-hat. "It's time we tipped the scales." His serious expression evaporated in a fit of giggles as he tossed the dice high into the air once more. 14

"Trick is right Jack, we're going to tip the balance in our favor. You told us you wanted power did you not?" King looked at him sternly, daring him to disagree. 15

"That I did." Jack agreed softly. 16

Trick's dice landed on the concrete floor with an echoing clatter, a six and three showing. The noise in the sudden silence gave Jack a jolt and a single card slipped from his deck. The jack of hearts landed face up at his feet, staring blankly back at him.

Author notes

It's a modern Faerie Tale...This is something I've started and not sure how far I'll go with it. If people like it (or I become addicted to writing it) it will continue.

I see it as an Alice in Wonderland spin off. Well, maybe a spin off of the idea...hmmm...well maybe not...

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It's a story in progress and unfinished.

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  • Forgotten Anomaly
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow, that was absolutly wonderful. I have never read anything like this before. I am hooked. I want to know what's going on, what's going to happen... if their is more I shall read it.


  • Star-Vomit
    October 17, 2008

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    You know what this reminded me of? Not just Alice in Wonderland, but also "Tithe" by Holly Black. Have you ever read it? It sparked my mind when you said "Dark Court" "Light Court" and "Solitary Fey". It might be off of something else, but that just reminded me...
    Crap, here I go babbling again. XD
    Great Job! This was awesome, and I loved how mysterious and sort of hacked off (in a good way) the ending was. Of course, it says Chapter One, so it makes since that it would be cut off, but if it was a standalone story, I do love cliffhangers.
    GAh! Why can't I stop babbling?!
    Great job, but one thing, show don't tell. That's all the criticism I have, otherwise, it was great as Heck...in a good way...

    • Six-Feet-Underwater
      October 17, 2008
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      thanks. Actually yeah I have read Tithe, and Valiant, and Ironside. hehe, I love Holly Black's books. You might like Wicked Lovely too if you haven't read it. I noticed a lot of the faeire books involved courts, namely a light and dark, so I wanted to include that. Glad you liked it.


  • Valkyrie silver member
    September 17, 2008

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    Well I love the idea muchly; it sounds verymost intriguing, and I'd love to see more of it! I love Trick. What a cool name! Did Ace not get named in here? Is he the mysterious "male" you name?
    And the cards on the left of the screen are pretty cool, but with the red font you're using, it's very hard to read all the words on the edge, where they overlap the picture.
    Unfortunately, this was not only hard to read because of the red-on-red overlap, but it seemed pretty rough in the editing department too. Some general smoothing will make it flow much better. Here's the things that caught my eye:
    P1 your 2nd and 3rd sentences are fragments
    P2, shocking blue, the other
    grey; they were
    the sentence "A short means..." is a fragment as well
    dice before him, watching
    P5 comma after Ah
    P6 elite group, was
    and you don't need a comma after small
    He top = Her top
    I'd say start a new sentence about her long coppery red hair, otherwise it sounds like either her chest or her dress has long coppery red hair
    P7 The male? Who's this? There are other males present...
    don't need a comma after pants
    peaking = peeking
    built but a delicate face the was decorated = build but a delicate face that was decorated
    shorter then = shorter than
    longer then = longer than
    P8 are they're = are there
    P9 stood up - either a semicolon or period instead of the comma there
    with his dice, it was
    Abandoned, dark, and creepy from years of being like that, they were meeting in the dead of night. - hee hee, "they" are "abandoned, dark and creepy", the way you wrote this sentence
    dirt stained could use a hyphen between the words there
    Then again,
    P10 with him, Jack knew
    P12 court s/b Court (2X)
    were even playing = we're
    lightly, having
    it's new = its
    P13 balance needs a comma after it, since you have "Jack said" following it
    time, it seemed
    don't seem to need the "it" in the third sentence
    haled = hailed
    capitalize dark and light court
    P14 scowled, securing
    top-hat doesn't need the hyphen
    P15 is right, Jack,
    power, did you not
    P16 did needs a comma not a period again
    P17 a jolt, and a

    • Six-Feet-Underwater
      September 17, 2008
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      Yeah, grammar's never been my strong point. Thanks for the corrections, I'll fix it later. heh, glad you liked it. I thought I'd fixed the background/words, guess not huh? thanks again!

      As for the Ace, that comes into play later.


  • Rock-n-roll
    September 17, 2008

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    This is very creative, it's a good comparison with the cards. Kinda confusing at points, but overall good work.

    • Six-Feet-Underwater
      September 17, 2008
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      I can see how it gets confusing, but it's only the beginning and not everthing's been explained yet. Hehe, thanks for reading!


  • Luckyk
    September 17, 2008

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    This is unusual at times i get lost between the fact that these are peope we're talking about and not cards...but then again is it that way or the other way around...the description is THAT good it has me lost at times...so if you're gonna keep writing it i'll definitely love to read more...

    • Six-Feet-Underwater
      September 17, 2008
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      Thanks, I tried to relate the character to suits of cards, I'm not even entirely sure why, it seemed like an interesting idea at the time. I think it just gives them that extra something to their little gang.

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