Dirty Feet chapter two

We laid there kissing and touching each other. Then suddenly I sat up. "I have an idea, lets go swimming." He agreed and I moved off of him so he could find his board shorts. I watched him change and as he pulled off his shirt, I grabbed him by the waist and pulled him back to the bed on top of me. Our lips met and I was once again lost in his kiss. His tongue touched mine softly, i bit his lower lip playfully, my fingers ran through his hair. 1

"I like your hands in my hair." He whispered. 2

"Well good because I like your hair. But this band aid keeps getting stuck." He grabbed my finger, slowly took the band aid off, examined my finger, and decided it was fine. "Thank you doctor," I told him. "Now can we please go swimming?"3

"Yeah. I'm dying to see you in a bikini." He put his board shorts on, kissed me, then held my hand as we walked downstairs to my house so I could change. 4

My roommate was asleep in our room so I snuck in, grabbed my cutest bikini and changed in the bathroom. He was waiting for me in the kitchen. A bottle of cheap vodka sat on the counter. "Lets take a shot before we go." He agreed. I poured two big shots and got a soda to chase with.5

"To neighbors," he said.6

"To neighbors," I replied and we downed the shots. I quickly grabbed the soda and chased the shot. I held the soda out to him but instead of grabbing it, he grabbed me. As soon as I gulped, he kissed me, his mouth was the taste i was trying to avoid but I didn't mind.7

"You're my chaser." He said after the long kiss. He took my hand and we walked the short distance to the beach. Slowly, I made my way into the freezing water, the moon and the glow of distant parties as our only lights. I was barely past my ankles in the water when all of a sudden, he picked me up and carried me past the break zone. He let me down in waist deep water and dunked his head under. The water was so cold I started to shiver. He held me close and rubbed my back. I kissed his shoulder. The salty taste and his warm body made me want to stay like that forever.8

to be continued...9

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  • sandypr.
    August 31, 2008
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    Really good but I agree with Tiger-Lily. I want to read the rest of the story though.


  • Tiger-Lily
    August 28, 2008

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    Hm...honestly, I didn't see the point here. As far as I know, all they do is kiss. -__- Maybe more substance plot wise. Make the roomie wake up?

    -HT


  • Noisome.
    August 28, 2008
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    I see this is a chapter two, and I think it's great that it can stand on its own as well. I really liked this, it was so cute! The details were simple and rather adorable, in all honesty. They seem so lovey and spontaneous! I love it and I'm kind of jealous of your character. Very cute.


  • XxRaDiAnTtRaGeDyXx
    August 27, 2008

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    I agree with Valkarie. I like the line "You're my chaser" That's too cute. Can't wait to see the rest of this.


  • Valkyrie silver member
    August 26, 2008
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    Awww.."You're my chaser." What a line.
    How handy for your character to be able to afford more than one bikini, so that she may pick out the "cutest" one for her man to see her in.
    Really, you did a great job with the dialogue and the descriptions, and the story flows very well. A good read.

  • SailorSanji
    August 25, 2008
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    I like it!

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